Reviewer: codeman83 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 28 2014 7:21 AM Title: Chapter 02 - Breakfast

I always liked this story, and can tell you improved and changed quite a bit of it so far.

I'm excited to see what else you've changed in it. Can't wait to see the vehicle shrinking and the scene at the park in particular,  just to see how many more details you throw in this time around!

Keep up the good work!

Author's Response:

Hey, thanks for the review! That scene is coming up soon, it's one of my favourites! It was my first attempt at writing something like that, and I've got some ideas on how to improve it greatly. I hope you like it!

--TFK