Date: May 15 2014 7:43 AM Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings
Dang, dawn's gonna collapse the universe just to be with Tucker! Not that she knows, but the agent did tell her it was a possibility ans she shrugged it off.
Author's Response:
Yeah but if faced with hard evidence she might actually change her mind. Or she might just carry on not caring.
Date: May 15 2014 1:30 AM Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings
Oops, I meant Tucker. Yeah Jessica isn't doing anything for awhile.
Author's Response:
Don't worry, it's a simple mistake.
[Report This]Date: May 14 2014 7:00 PM Title: Chapter 23: Dire News
Looks like Dawn's busting out. Part of me thinks they should tell Tucker about his daughter and have him talk her into returning to the future. On the other hand, not knowing what will happen if they give him foreknowledge of such events, plus the risk of him getting killed by these events is a real issue. One thing is for certain though, they are running out of time. And trying to both subdue and convince Dawn to go back before she finds her dad where ever it is they're handing him is going to waste even more time.
Now if there was just some way for Jessica to prevent Tucker's death.
Author's Response:
Thanks for continuing to read the story. We'll just have to wait and see how things fair out.
[Report This]Date: May 14 2014 6:01 PM Title: Chapter 23: Dire News
Uh oh, Dawn's going to break Jessica out and this could get ugly.
So,Dawn is really just a lonely girl. She got bullied because of her size and found solace in only one person at school and she hates her mother for giving her that size and for keeping her from her father.
Her unstoppable growth is really disturbing, she could really cause the end of Home if she continues to grow. I don't think she'll grow to the size of a star but she could die the size of a continent. Maybe if they can find a way to stop her from growing she'll agree to back.
I have a feeling it is all up to Tucker, only he can convince her to go back and save the world. He will be a hero but just not in the way Dawn said it.
Author's Response:
She won't be breaking Jessica, don't forget she's in limbo. For Dawn they may find a way to stop her from growing, but for now she's growing like a weed. Maybe Tucker will convince her to go back, or maybe Dawn will decide to do it herself
Date: May 10 2014 9:05 AM Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings
I didn't say Jess was a terrible parent, just that being a single mother didn't cut the mustard when raising Dawn. Anyway, I looking forward to what's gonna happen next, Dawn certainly is an interesting enough character...
Author's Response:
Maybe that's so, you can understand that raising a girl like Dawn would be extremely difficult for a single parent. Even one with Jessica's size. Unfortunately now is the end of the daily updates, GTS world is up to date with the story so now the chapters will on average come once every four to five days.
[Report This]Date: May 10 2014 8:34 AM Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings
The fact that Dawn turned out like this means that Jess alone wasn't cut out to raise a child. Its obvious that having a father in her life would have made things better. And I can't really blame her for hating Jessica, especially if what she's saying is true...I can't imagine what it must feel like to finally discover who your father was only to find him dead already.
In a way, the future she comes from is even more bleak than the future she made up...At least in that future she KNEW her father before he died a hero. And it's obvious that this reunion isn't going to last though, the universe is already ripping itself apart from Dawn simply existing in that time period!
Great stuff, I can't wait to see where this goes, I definitely got the feels in this chapter!
Author's Response:
Thanks for continuing to read but I don't want to give the idea that Jessica's a bad parent. She may have had a good reason for not letting Dawn know until she was old enough (You'll find out in future chapters). Maybe her hatred for Jessica isn't just because of the whole Tucker issue.
Date: May 08 2014 1:20 PM Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings
It feels like the original was more about the lovey-dovey stuff between Tucker and Jess, whereas this is more about the world aroubd them. I cant really lean one way or another yet since this isnt finished...Plus I was a lot younger when I read the original, so my tastes and reading level were different.
Date: May 07 2014 8:49 AM Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings
Awesome! Im glad Dawn made it into this rewrite as well, although not in the way I expected! At this point this may as well be a new story because I dont have a clue whats gonna happen next!
Author's Response:
Do you prefer this or the original? It's nice to do things differently since it allows me to improve where I felt the original lacked.
Date: May 06 2014 3:14 PM Title: Chapter 13: A new Jessica
Part of me want the story to go foward and another part says the back story you've been adding is rather good.
Here:
You never know how’s lurking around.
You mean: who is
Date: May 06 2014 8:51 AM Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings
O_O I dont remember THAT happening!
Author's Response:
I wanted to have some new stuff in there so that fans of the old story wasn't just reading the same thing again
Date: May 06 2014 2:27 AM Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings
It looks I will have to start soon, looking at the rate at which you write.
Author's Response:
Again do it in your own time mate. I just appriciate you writing it.
Date: May 05 2014 11:53 PM Title: Chapter 12: Metamorphsis
Her transformation reminds me of some of the older giantess movies I've seen. It's the Taylor Made Clips. Everything seems to rip apart in those. In my opinion, once you've seen one of them you've seen them all. Since those days giantess movies have become much better, but I make no apologies for my blasé attitude in relation to certain studios.
Many people just don't seem to put the effort it. Clips4Sale stuff generally tends to annoy me. There's this myth that just about anyone can make a giantess movie. They squish some food and call it giantess. Alright, moan over.
Date: May 04 2014 8:12 PM Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings
@gadget, I see it as self-defense and those girls deserve it anyway and at the time she didn't know the true extent of her powers.
[Report This]Date: May 04 2014 1:30 PM Title: Chapter 16: The Date
Isn't Jess hitting that girl misuse of powers? Anyway I did enjoy this chapter even though I already had a pretty good idea how it'd go down. I'm actually excited to get back to the main story, not that this backstory wasn't good...
Now here some friendly critique for you:-------------------------------------
I feel like one of your weaknesses as a writer though is "telling" us things instead of "showing" them.
Like for example, a couple of chapters back the story said that Jess had this really big heart and she was a wonderful person and whatnot, more than all the agents at the base.
But instead of telling us that through the narrator, you could've had Jess help an old man across the street on her way to the office (maybe causing her to almost be late), maybe she could've rescued a cat from a tree, etc.
By showing us the readers these things it would make us REALLY see Jess as a great, noble person. Telling us how gentle and nice she is isn't the same as showing us. And so far, other than being a decent person she hasn't really lived up to those statements yet.
I see this because I do this too sometimes. I have the need to tell people things about characters in the story instead of setting up situations that would prove they fit the bill. I'm sure you'll have things planned to really show us how big a heart Jess has in the story but I'm just pointing out something to work on. Actions speak louder than words they say.
Author's Response:
Thank you for that, I will definitely try and show her heart more in future chapters instead of just saying it. BTW I hope you enjoy what happens next.
Date: April 30 2014 2:07 PM Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings
I already read this story, totally, on writing.com, as a simple visitor. But I did it, and appreciate it. I prefer gentle giantesses, and you're a master about gentle giantesses stories. I think it !
I don't know if additionnal content has been added at the original version, thanks to tell me. If yes, I'll read it.
Author's Response:
Yeah there is a LOT more content and I really hope that you do read my story.
Date: April 30 2014 9:41 AM Title: Chapter 12: Metamorphsis
I suppose it's actually nice to have a bit of backstory but I would have prefered to move on with the story than discuss these details since you've dedicated quite a lot to expanding Jessica's story.
Author's Response:
There will be a few more chapters about Jessica's origin and then it's back to the main story.
Date: April 30 2014 8:44 AM Title: Chapter 10: Where it all began
I'm not sure if this chapter was needed, but I like it nonetheless, and I image the details are relevant to future chapters.
[Report This]Date: April 29 2014 1:17 PM Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings
Really digging this rewrite! I especially like how indepth your going with certain aspects such as Jessica backstory! I don't remember there being quite as much detail into her back story and the mechanics of the superpower serum in the old one! Great stuff, this was one of the fans back in the day and I'm loving everything you've done with this one so far!
Author's Response:
Yeah I wanted to expand it and there will also be a prequel/short story series to enjoy soon. But first I'm writing a fantasy series with Jessica and Tucker which I will start writing when I've finished this series.
Date: April 28 2014 7:31 PM Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings
IIIIIII totally remember reading this when it was on writing.com!
You're the reason I got into writing, and my Ant Boy stories were inspired by your giant girl and Spiderman stories!
Loving the rewrite keep it up!
Author's Response: Thanks for reading my friend. I'm glad that I inspired you and don't forget to rate the story.
Date: April 28 2014 1:14 PM Title: Chapter 8: The Calvary
It's amazing to think that even a giantess can be a damsel in distress. I'm sure everything will turn out ok though.
Author's Response:
Hopefully they will and thank you very much for continuing to read. I really appreciate it and I hope that you enjoy the future chapters. Don't forget there will be a fantasy spin off and a prequel/short story series after I've finished this story.