Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: April 24 2014 3:13 PM Title: Chapter 6: All The Way To Doloria

Those in Jessica's society seem to have the same culture (almost) to those in English speaking Western countries. What do I mean by this? For a start they seem to have the same sorts of words regarded as "swear" words. You also mention that Jessica has a high Intelligence Quotient even though that test is a human invention. Since the society Jessica lives in is far more advanced one should think (assume) they have come up with a much better way of testing intelligence.

Here: 

"I wasn’t expected that. I’m sorry I woke you up.”

You mean: expecting

 

Finally, I find it odd that you would suddenly switch the perspective of the story and immediately give away what's going to happen in the next chapter.

Author's Response: Remember that everything is translated immediately so any swear word can still be understood. It may not directly be that word but it would still be a word that's an offensive term. Don't worry not everything is revealed for the next chapter.