Date: April 19 2014 4:35 AM Title: A Day at Home
Why's Kyra so domineering and abusive towards her dad? He didn't do anything to her. This story's starting to confuse me.
Author's Response:
I suppose mostly she's just a petulant teenager who is letting her new power get to her head. However, I wouldn't say the father is exactly innocent in all of this, as he has indeed done some very inappropriate things (spying on her , sneaking into her room, jerking off on her clothes ...). He's not exactly winning any awards for father of the year at this point ...
[Report This]Date: April 17 2014 9:27 PM Title: A Day at Home
Thanks you for the long chapter, it takes away the pain from it ending.
But defiantly dramatic recent of events. Which is good, plus I don't have any criticism.
Author's Response:
Yeah, I think the chapters will start to get a little longer on average now, as some of the scenes are pretty long later on. Thanks for reading.
Date: April 17 2014 6:18 AM Title: A Day at Home
Another good chapter. It was interesting to see the dynamics of their relationship altered after the previous night, with Kyra playing nice occasionally but still managing to get into his head, and your speaker coming to terms with the fact that he kind of enjoys their interactions. It did seem a little silly when he tried pulling the "when I was your age" card about her upcoming date, well after the point where she's clearly disregarded his opinions to the point of raping him. Maybe that's just how deep his denial is, though. Regardless, a fine job here. I've got no idea where you find the drive to make your chapters this lengthy.
Author's Response:
Yeah, maybe I should have written his reaction to learning Kyra's going on a date a little differently. But I do like the thought of him trying to retain what little he has left of his parental instincts by trying to speak up about it (even if he knows it'll almost certainly be useless). It kind of highlights how feeble and 'lost' he is in the absence of his normal fatherly identity which has been so quickly stripped from him lately. I did notice that it came out seeming kind of silly on a practical level when I looked through it again though.
Yes, that was a long chapter, wasn't it? It took what felt like forever just to read through it again myself -- I don't know how you all can keep up with reading it :).