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Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 17 2014 11:32 PM Title: Chapter 25: Truth and Hope

Despite having no GTS in it this chapter was really good! Seeing the slow progression of change with Manchent and Henry over the course of several video logs was really well executed, I give you props there! Now what will the resistance do with this information? Ooooh, the suspence is driving me nuts!



Author's Response:

Well there was some, just dream GTS. Glad you liked the logs, I was rather proud of them myself. And you won't have to wait too long.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 17 2014 4:17 PM Title: Chapter 25: Truth and Hope

And the big reveal...is something we were introduced to ages ago. With some new information, about the pipe. I want to see how they react to it, and what else is on there first, then Samantha and William. After that, Aviel and Fionne would be nice too.



Author's Response:

Well its a big reveal to the characters and while I could have keep it a secret, anyone who played the game would know it so I figured everyone should be on the same playing field.

Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 17 2014 4:00 PM Title: Chapter 25: Truth and Hope

Wow that was an epic reveal.

Personally I want to see how everyone reacts to the truth but I also want to know what Aviel and Fionne is up to. 

 



Author's Response:

Thanks, and Aviel and Flonne weren't even a choice! Oh fine...

Reviewer: Recoveringlurker Signed [Report This]
Date: October 11 2014 4:46 PM Title: Prologue

This is easily my favorite story on this site. I appreciate the the time you have obviously put into it. I have one question though. And it may be totally unimportant and irrelevant. But in chapter 6 Pyrrha was badly wounded in that fight against the giantess while sanders and herself were escaping. Then it seemed they were discovered after the fight and sanders contemplated using nanobots to help her get moving. Then in a later chapter in hope sanders recalled not using the nanobots on Pyrrha. So how did she get the strength to escape when society personnel were pursuing them after the fight?

Author's Response:

Glad to her. As for your question, I have been meaning to go back an explain that but never got a chance.

 

Sanders had Pyrrha eat some of the giantess to get back enough strength to get moving. He didn't like it, but at the same time he figured the giantess deserved it so it didn't really bother him too much. With her strength partily regained, they managed to get into the ruins of the city proper and slip away.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 03 2014 12:06 PM Title: Chapter 24: Fury of the Present, Curse of the Past

At the risk of sounding like a broken record (vinyl forerunner of the compact disc), you continue to amaze me with your plausible depictions of each character's emotional make-up. The fight between Jacob and Gerard, for instance. I loved it! As realistic as it was exciting.

Realistic, because if Jacob is in danger of becoming another Jason, then Gerard is more than halfway to becoming another Darius. And, that is most undeniably a _bad_ thing! For as I pointed out in an earlier review. Total abandonment of one's ideals during a war is inadvisable, as it risks turning one into one of those monsters of Nietzchean philosophy (i.e., worse than those one fights).

Author's Response:

Glad you liked it and I don't mind for you to keep saying you like it.

 

It is a possiblity that we are seeing the cycle start all over again.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 02 2014 1:45 PM Title: Chapter 24: Fury of the Present, Curse of the Past

Jacob is the new Jason, it seems. Let's see if Jacob meets the same fate, or if he changes in time to survive.

It's also good to get a bit more info on Darius' sister, and well done on the rest of the chapter.



Author's Response:

It seems that way and we can only hope. Perhaps Samantha will save him from that fate...if she is alive to do that anyway.

 

I want to do more on her, but its hard to without just sidelining the entire story. Thanks either way.

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: October 01 2014 6:26 PM Title: Chapter 24: Fury of the Present, Curse of the Past

This chapter was hard to read too. The nasty bleakness that encompassed this chapter just made it a slog to read through...Not that its a bad thing but I need to read a cheesy love gts love story to ease myself.



Author's Response:

It was supposed to be rather depressing and horrid. I wish I could say the next chapter is better but...well we are in the shit now and things won't be looking up for awhile.

Reviewer: The Demon Signed [Report This]
Date: October 01 2014 4:59 PM Title: Prologue

Nice.



Author's Response:

Thanks

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 23 2014 9:21 AM Title: Chapter 23: Sacrifice and Legacies

I see nothing wrong with double-spaces between paragraphs and/or character dialogue. Or, with the rest of this tantalizing chapter, in general.

Finally! We're getting to the solution of the mystery.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 17 2014 7:12 AM Title: Chapter 23: Sacrifice and Legacies

This is one of the best stories on this site. Your willingness to do bad things to characters makes Samantha's situation that much tenser.

And soon a key piece of backstory will be revealed. Can't wait.



Author's Response:

Thanks and yes I have no regards offing people if I feel its warrented.

Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 16 2014 8:02 PM Title: Chapter 23: Sacrifice and Legacies

Well if there was anything that would make Isabella do what she did it would be learning the truth beyond the shrink incident. If that is the truth Madysen's is talking about then it will be interesting what Darius does with it and if it will really change anything. 



Author's Response:

It will indeed.

 

As for changing things...well knowing and having proof that the Society caused the shrink disaster and the deaths of billions of people...not exactly something the Society would want to get out.

 

Doubly so considering people in the Society seem to be unaware of that.

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 16 2014 6:31 PM Title: Chapter 23: Sacrifice and Legacies

Holy shit. And the hype begins! Im soo excited for the next chapter!

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 06 2014 7:20 AM Title: Chapter 22: Survival and Choices

OK! I admit it. You've got me thoroughly confused. Mutated fairies with apparent mind-reading abilities and a cleanliness fetish? Refugee shrinkies who recognize Sanders? Just what the frig are you building up to here?

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 05 2014 3:14 PM Title: Chapter 22: Survival and Choices

Dammit, my favorite resistance characters again! First Lindsay now this! Just as I was warming up to Samantha and William after his badass stunt this chapter! At least Sanders figured out where the thing in Lindale was...

Great chapter overall, I guess I should have steeled myself better for the deaths this chapter.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 02 2014 12:33 PM Title: Chapter 21: The Pieces Arrive

A Society _convoy_ headed toward Lindale, within two or three days of Gabby's fortuitious reunion with Sanders? As S.Z. Sakall might say:

"I smell a rat in Denmark."

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 29 2014 6:24 PM Title: Chapter 21: The Pieces Arrive

This chapter was amazing! It had a bit of everything: romance with Gabby and Jimmy, Fanservice (Gab's toned ass), humour with Pyrra's shannanigans, and even tension at the very end. Crazy how much you manage to cram into every chapter!

And Pyrra blowing Gabbys ears out was the highlight of this chapter for me. Pyrra can travel long distances with no rest, put up with being hungry for decent stretches of time, but if you fuck with her beauty sleep, oh ho ho...prepare yourself XD.

Great chapter and I cant wait to see how shit will go down next chapter!



Author's Response:

Thanks, and yeah it was long but I couldn't stop stuffing shit in.

 

It was partilly the sleep, both mostly cause Gabby nearly blew her ears out by yelling right into it. I said it was like an air horn going off in your ear for a reason.

 

And shit will go down. But for who?

Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 29 2014 5:03 PM Title: Chapter 21: The Pieces Arrive

Hmm...quite literally the calm before the storm. I'm steeling myself for the deaths to come.

Pyrrah's growing awareness is also something very cool to see. 



Author's Response:

I can neither confirm or deny that people will die. All I can say is shit's about to get real.

 

I will admit, I was tempted to not even do this whole thing, but changed my mind. Glad I did now that I am doing it.

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 17 2014 1:20 AM Title: Chapter 20: Marauders

Im glad you are deciding to break up the trip to Lindale with all these little side conflicts, it really adds to the sense of JUST how dangerous the world in this story truly is! And I can really apprechiate how terrifying an enemy the catgirls are!

I mean you can blow a hole in them and so long as they have some soldiers or meat to munch on they can get back on their feet in no time flat! It's almost as if the worse enemy of humans fighting a cat girl is the humans themselves, because as soon as one of them is eaten the catgirl can heal itself!

I kind of find it odd that nobody thought of creating a bomb that would detonate when someone dies or something like that. You know, so if a catgirl grabs a body then it would self destruct, inflicting damage but also cutting off the catgirls supply of flesh to eat.

Or to be safer, have a bomb trigger attached to a tooth or something so that they can self-detonate with no hands, once they are in the grip of a catgirl or in her stomach...I don't know but it makes sense to me. Great chapter by the way!



Author's Response:

Glad you like it. And yep catgirls are terrifying for a reason.

 

Yeah they were made to be the ultimate shock troops in a sense. Ones that kill your people and, by killing them, can come back for more punishment.

 

I will say the thought has been thrown around by the Resistance, but they need all their explosive stuff for bombs, rockets, guns, etc... Its not that they wouldn't be willing to do it, most people would rather suffer a quick BOOM death rather than be slowly digisted, but they just don't have the resources to give everyone a dead man switch.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 16 2014 8:09 AM Title: Chapter 20: Marauders

Complications, complications! Nothing but complications.

;-)

Author's Response:

pretty much

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 06 2014 8:07 AM Title: Chapter 19: Cracking Alliance

You continue to press all the right emo-buttons. That is; the debate (behind Sanders' back) covered all the pros and cons that might plausibly arise during a real war-time conference. As far as Gabby's lying, though? It was probably more of a half-truth. And, here's why I think so.

Gabby's first assumption, about the interview, was some kind of initiation by gang-rape. Which makes me surmise that she _was_ found by a scouting party of Elves (probably after the same thing the Phoenixes are). And, seeing her under-dressed,...?

Well, let's just say that her threat to the Phoenixes had probably already been carried out in fact. ;-)

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