[Report This]Date: April 04 2014 8:49 PM Title: Chapter 17
Once again, beautiful writing!
"her stomach formed a wide beach of living softness".
Usually I cant picture your writing, but this was one of the many great examples that I was easily able to imagine.
Author's Response:
Thanks a Lot, Tom! That's really what I strive to do in my writing. I'm focusing more on the discriptions than the story itself. I'd like to think that you can visualize everything thats happening as you read it, and that's really what I'm trying to get better at...
Thanks again, your comments do alot to give me the drive to keep going and I always look forward to your reviews! :)
[Report This]Date: April 04 2014 6:30 PM Title: Chapter 17
Sounds like someone is becoming an unhappier camper than Bob, himself. Ah! The "little" ironies of life.*
*Come to think of it: that'd make a great title for a gts-story! ;-)
Author's Response:
Yes! I think 'someone', already did that one Cary. --- Roundrobin too...
[Report This]Date: April 04 2014 2:56 PM Title: Chapter 17
Good luck Mark! It isn’t going to be easy to escape, but you certainly don’t want to end up like Tony.
Author's Response:
Thanks Spooky! Mark's gonna need it! Tony, on the other hand, well.... -his luck has ran out!