[Report This]Date: February 22 2014 8:32 AM Title: Chapter 5
Oh, yeah! Di's _definitely_ not reuniting them, just yet.
Author's Response:
Thanks Cary! - you can look for her to say something just like that in the next installment-; "*.*"
[Report This]Date: February 21 2014 6:32 PM Title: Chapter 5
Lots of descriptions, but not much action.
I felt like something was going to happen, and then the chapter ended.
Author's Response:
I am trying to carry out a storyline here. Not every chapter will have a sex scene. Dianes not a nypho, or a cruella type giantess, she's a real sweety, and if something happens with her, it will most likely be because she had no other choice...
The nature of the beast is slow and smooth. Makes for a much more meaningful effect when it seems more realistic, don't you think? :)
[Report This]Date: February 21 2014 5:18 PM Title: Chapter 5
Bob needs to get back to Carly! :) Noticed less spelling errors. However, I’d recommend that you use ellipses less often. They are good for hesitation or faltering speech/thoughts, but that is about it. Rather than repeatedly implying to the reader that you have more to say (when the sentence already seems fairly complete), best to just use a period.
Author's Response:
Yeah, I guess I just like the way they tail off at the end of a sentence... Ha:) I also have a problem of 'unconsciously' tossing in apostrophes at any given time, I had to constantly focus on that to break myself of doing it. I would just 'hit 'S 'S at the end of everything with an 'S' on the end. I get so wrapped up in the content that I was just so focused on the mental image of whats taking place in the story, that those little things like that would just 'automatically' happen.
I've needed that spellcheck for a while, was just putting it off because of the distaction it would cause while writing. Although, now that Ive got it, maybe I'll get even better. :) Thanks Spooky!