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Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 29 2014 6:21 PM Title: Ch. 19 'A loving Mother'

Fantastic! Im glad he is going to stay with Diane; they didnt really do much together except talk, but I hope this chapter has set up the next one to be all action. I particularly enjoy the consistent action with Sandra and Jim, now I want Diane to have lots of action with Bob, only in a more slower, sensual approach.

Hopefully, this feeling that Diane has is related to him going inside her lingerie. Just a suggestion.

Also, I am impressed that you uploaded these chapters in quick succesion that I cant really complain since I know you work hard to complete these.

Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing Tom!  Yeah, I could have easily combined these last two chapters, but they contrasted so greatly that I just had to keep them seperate.  I was hoping that the contrast itself would build up Dianes sensuality to the full extent possable...

-and,  simultinaneously give Sandra the ultimate dominatrix effect!   Jim's in for alot more abuse from her, she just can't stop herself from treating him this way after he dumped her like a piece of trash...   Poor Jim, if he ever gets out of this he'll never look at a woman the sameway again!

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 29 2014 6:06 PM Title: Chapter 18

Perfect. I enjoyed your imagination and detail. I just wished that the trip to the Mall was also described in detail as well. The conversation would have been interesting. Jim seems to be doing fine, how about Bob? Cant wait for next chapter!

Author's Response:

Thank you very much!   The trip to the Mall would have taken place during the time period that we were watching Bobbys scene play out, so as I try and keep everything within the same time period, I was forced to narrative that part, rather than skipping back in time and all that jazz,... I guess I got a little bit lazy too!

The next chapter will be much longer, and a little bit more involved, as Diane gets to know her tiny son-in-law a whole lot better.

Reviewer: wildcatman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 29 2014 5:30 PM Title: Chapter 1

You've really built up Diane to Goddess status, I hope she doesn't turn devious and mean...



Author's Response:

Thanks Cat!  You caught-on to exactly what I was trying to accomplish! 

--  Don't worry 'bout that,  Diane,  she doesn't have a mean bone in her body!

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 29 2014 3:48 PM Title: Ch. 19 'A loving Mother'

A mother-in-law who's a gentle giantess? How refreshing! :-)

It remains to be seen, though, if Bob is going to wake up in the "protective" custody of a birdcage or a hamster cage?

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 28 2014 10:16 AM Title: Ch. 17 'Diane's Rescue'

I've always said that exercising women look sexier in black leotards. ;-)

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 27 2014 10:36 PM Title: Ch. 17 'Diane's Rescue'

I like this intimate start with Diane, but she needs to sound confident and sexy like she knows all the moves or something. A mother of five should have had plenty of experience. Diane's behaviour reminds me of a teenager who discovered pleasure.

There are plenty of moments where Bob is thinking, but I would like to see some thoughts from Diane. For example, im a panties fan, so maybe she could be thinking, ("You know", Diane thought, "I know exactly where to put Bob to hide him for the entire day"). (Then Diane says to Bob, "Little man, I got the perfect spot to hide you from Carly. You will be completely safe".) Then you can insert a narration, "Little did Bob know what Diane was talking about, but he felt reassured hearing that it was safe". (Just a suggestion. I enjoy a confident Milf).

Lastly, I hope Bob falls through the cup into her underwear or something similar. Or you can surprise me. :)

Keep it up, I like your commitment to posting rapidly.

Reviewer: Flaming_Heart Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 27 2014 10:29 PM Title: Ch. 17 'Diane's Rescue'

He can't catch a break, I guess if he did the story would've been over by now.

Ant great story and plot line, can't wait to see more.

Reviewer: riczar Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 27 2014 6:43 PM Title: Ch. 17 'Diane's Rescue'

Well, no help for Bob from this crazy family.  The way things are going, he's probably going to end up going native, since he's probably losing faith in his fellow man.



Author's Response:

Going Native! _ '*.*'_  Maybe so...  but what about Jimmy?  heh heh heh...  ;)

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: January 27 2014 5:45 PM Title: Ch. 17 'Diane's Rescue'

I doesn't seem like poor Bobby's ever gonna find someone that actually wants to help him! Not that I'm complaining, since it's what makes the story!



Author's Response:

Thanks Gadgetmawombo,  jus' keepin it Real!  ;)

Reviewer: tylby Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 27 2014 2:58 PM Title: Chapter 1

Thanks man, great story! Want more scenes with Sandra and Jim.



Author's Response:

In the next one, chapter 18, we'll go back and see whats happening with poor little Jimmy, since he's become Sandra's little toy...

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 1:15 PM Title: Chapter 16

Excellent chapter. I hope Diane and Bob get intimate secretly and I hope she hides him in her pants or even better, her panties!

i suggest Bob wants to be kept away from Carly, and Diane has a solution that will give her pleasure. Just a suggestion.

Author's Response:

I like that suggestion, kind Sir...  so be it!  ;)

Reviewer: riczar Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 25 2014 11:44 PM Title: Chapter 16

I know Diane won't do anything that will hurt her daughters, even at Bob's expense.  My hope is that she'll try to patch things up between him and Carly.  Maybe a little unprofessional marriage counseling if you will.  Otherwise things could get a lot worse for poor Bob.  And remember Chloe now has a vial of the stuff.  Who will she shrink?  I can't wait to see more!



Author's Response:

Yeah, Chloe's waiting in the wings here, we'll have to check-out what's happening with Jim and Sandra first, then we'll see what Chloe ends up doing...

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 25 2014 6:01 PM Title: Chapter 16

Poor Bob! Doesn't he know that blood-relatives are thicker than thieves?

Author's Response:

Well, you have to remember, Bob's brain shrank too!  :0

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 23 2014 4:23 PM Title: Ch. 15 'A Wild Ride'

Quite the--ahem!--little adventure he had there! But, now that he's back at her house, I still vote for discovery (even unaware capture) by the mother-in-law. ;-)

Author's Response:

Diane has you under her spell?...  Me Too!   I think your going to like the next few chapters...

Reviewer: riczar Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 20 2014 9:20 PM Title: Chapter 1

It's plain to see that there isn't any happy future for Bob with Carly.  Unless she snaps out of it and realizes all that's she's done and is willing to make amends.  I don't see him being happy with any of the women in his life.  Maybe its time to introduce someone else?  If I recall correctly he's a writer.  Maybe a visit from a female editor wondering why he's missed deadlines and never answers his phone?  Here's to hoping things will look up for poor Bob!



Author's Response:

Well, this is a story that I've had in mind for a long time.  As in real life, nothing ever goes as planed and with Bob, he's going on an adventure that he'll never forget!  Just a tip though,... things are definitely going to turn around sooooon....

Reviewer: wildcatman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 20 2014 7:34 PM Title: Chapter 1

I think I'm in lust wit' Carly! ;`)



Author's Response:

Me Too!  Thanks Cat!

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 20 2014 6:39 PM Title: Chapter 14

Well, Bob obviously isn't going to get any help from Sandy. Which raises the question: who should "just happen by" on the street--assuming he makes it as far as the front sidewalk--in time to "help" Bob?

I vote for his mother-in-law (even it's only unaware, still).

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 20 2014 6:11 PM Title: Chapter 1

Really nice update! Bob running away really spices things up, and hes completely right!...Any more of that and he'll end up buried in a matchbox in the backyard! Carly and her friends are insane! I kind of feel like sandra was treating him better, although looking at her now makes me shiver...I kind of feel bad for poor bobby, he seems like a decent guy and doesnt deseve to be humiliated and hurt by the one he loves.



Author's Response:

Thanks Gadgetmawombo,  Carly's not 'insane', her and her sister are just experiencing this for the first time too!  Having complete control over a real-live miniature person is something that nobody has ever experienced.  So, their just Sooo excited, that they got a little bit carried away...

Bob's realizing too, that everything he dreamed of 'in his fantasy's',  and his story's, would be nothing like the true reality of the situation... he's perminantly stuck at six inches tall, Forever!

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 19 2014 4:30 PM Title: Chapter 13

Sorry; no time to review. I need a REFILL on the ice water!

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 16 2014 8:06 PM Title: Chapter 1

I love this series and hope that it sees a proper ending! Having said that, I don't know how you can give this story a satisfying conclusion...Right now, bobby is stuck in a no-progression situation, and the bobby is starting to feel like a camera rather than a character.

Make him fight back a little, give him some more thoughts...The story is starting to suffer from what a lot of writters on this site succumb to which is: turning their main characters into cameras and putting them in set piece after set piece.

I loved the fact that Bobby got angry in this chapter and wanted to be in his dollhouse, a bit more of that would be nice! I hope you don't get bored and give up on this, despite my criticisms, I really do enjoy this story!



Author's Response:

Thanks Gadgetmawombo!  I never really concidered that...  but, your exactly right!   We tend to set up the enviroment,  place the characters inside it, then just revolve the 'camera' all around discribing the enormous 'view'!   I'll have to slow down a bit and allow for alot more character interaction in the coming chapters... 

Thanks for pointing that out...  I didn't concider it criticism, I needed some fresh perspective toward the overall story itself anyway.   I'm glad you took the time to point that out.

Thank you so much for following the story!   please keep up the comments.   

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