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Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 29 2014 6:45 PM Title: Chapter 18

Yep! She's totally broken him to her will. No "butts" about it.*


*Oh, come on! You KNOW I was going to say something like that. ;-D

Author's Response:

If there is a butt,.... you can bet it'll be a really BIG ONE!  ;)

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 29 2014 6:06 PM Title: Chapter 18

Perfect. I enjoyed your imagination and detail. I just wished that the trip to the Mall was also described in detail as well. The conversation would have been interesting. Jim seems to be doing fine, how about Bob? Cant wait for next chapter!

Author's Response:

Thank you very much!   The trip to the Mall would have taken place during the time period that we were watching Bobbys scene play out, so as I try and keep everything within the same time period, I was forced to narrative that part, rather than skipping back in time and all that jazz,... I guess I got a little bit lazy too!

The next chapter will be much longer, and a little bit more involved, as Diane gets to know her tiny son-in-law a whole lot better.

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