[Report This]Date: November 18 2013 11:24 PM Title: Chapter 1
I believe some spacing bewteen paragraphs would be a plus. As for the overall story.
From the way it is written I get the feeling that this is a one shot. It kind of has a Dr. Manhattan effect, but at the same time it also doesn't really go anywhere for me. It's kind of like reading the last page of a story and all the other obstacles are gone. I do see some hints that there can be more to this but for now it's a bit too empty for my taste. Please note that it's just my personal preference so I tried to critique the story by it's own merrits.
[Report This]Date: November 18 2013 9:27 PM Title: Chapter 1
As much as a pretentious train wreck Death Note was, I quite enjoyed this story. These kinds of giantesses are few and far between, it was refreshing.
Still, try your shot at improving pacing. The story was a bit all over the place, and felt rushed, like you were trying to squeeze all of her thoughts together.
Keep up the good work.
[Report This]Date: November 18 2013 9:10 PM Title: Chapter 1
Exactly what I feel about mega sized giantsand micros, what is the point, the size difference basicly shuts out any interaction