Reviewer: carnaj2 Signed [Report This]
Date: November 09 2013 8:50 AM Title: Chapter 4

I am enjoting your story very much so far. Your writing style is very good and as others have stated you are quite descriptive in the scenes you present, something which is a personal favorite of mine. The little things like that do tend to make the story more interesting and enjoyable in the end.

Chapter 4 seemed a bit rushed to me, however. The story flows nicely, and your characters seem real and believable, which is always a plus. Your grammer is very good and every scene seems well thought out with a definite direction, adding to the drama and suspense of what will happen next. There did seem to be a few more spelling errors than usual though. Nothing major or too distracting, but still something to be aware of.

I know we all want to write and post as quickly as possible, or at least I feel that way, AND we are all writing and posting here for our own enjoyment of  the Giant/Giantess fetish as well as the enjoyment of others. Still, taking a pause after a chapter is done and giving it another read through often finds those simple mistakes that we all make from time to time. Just a suggestion in way of critique. It is your story after all.

I did enjoy Carly's flashback and the reference to 'Alice in Wonderland', though I'm curious as to which version of the movie you had in mind as they are all a bit different and the book they were based on even more so. Still, Alice is often forgotten as a spark to the Giantess/shrinking fetish. I, myself often reference comic books and 'I Dream of Jeanie' as being that personal spark, so it's nice to see something different in that regard.

I am left wondering at the end of Chapter 4 though. Is Bob simply having a dream or did Carly somehow find the means to shrink him? If the latter and assuming Bob is trapped in her doll house, why did she add the extra precaution of hand-cuffing him to the bed? For that matter, where did she find four sets of tiny hand-cuffs, unless she shrunk those down along with Bob? And the keys must be microscopic. How will she manipulate those and free her tiny husband? Not that I am complaining as my bondage fetish is at least as strong as my Giantess and Feet fetishes, but little things like that nag at my curiosity. I know, 'Get a life, carnaj, it's just a story'.

In all though, I think you are doing a great job and I look forward to each new installment. Keep up the good work!