[Report This]Date: July 14 2014 3:58 PM Title: Chapter 1
Intriguing opener. Btw: "prequel" is technically a sequel that's set earlier than the story that inspired it. If this particular story is the first in even a two-part series, then the proper technical term is "prelude."
Example: "THE HOBBIT, as a novel, was prelude to the 'Lord of the Rings' trilogy of books. THE HOBBIT, as a movie franchise, is prequel to the LOTR franchise."
[Report This]Date: May 17 2014 6:45 AM Title: The Rise
Alas, poor Kyrie.
So, Zarelda's taken over the United States. In a country where democracy has such deep roots, I imagine there would be a lot of resistance and/or grudging acceptance no matter what she does.
I like that she was thirty feet and then fifty feet. It would be good to have her height correspond with her power.
I found her nudity a bit odd, though there's nothing really wrong with it. She can do that, of course, it's just not normally done.
[Report This]Date: May 16 2014 12:44 AM Title: The Rise
Wasn't expecting the big bad to win.
Well played.
[Report This]Date: May 15 2014 11:26 PM Title: Chapter 1
Ah, so she gets everything she wanted in the end. Or is it? Victoria still lives, this could all change if you ever do a sequel.
[Report This]Date: May 10 2014 9:43 PM Title: Chapter 20
BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO LOL!
Excellent cliffhanger and I'll be waiting for the end.
[Report This]Date: May 10 2014 6:56 PM Title: Chapter 20
I like this chapter. Nice action.
@Nostory: Could be. There's still the matter of his love of feet.
Date: May 10 2014 6:19 PM Title: Chapter 1
Looks like it will be the end of Zarelda. Unless there is one final twist.
Date: May 10 2014 2:27 PM Title: Chapter 1
IWH (I Will Have).
;)
Date: May 10 2014 1:37 PM Title: Chapter 1
?
Author's Response: Yes, the next chapter is the finale. However, I do not think you'll be disappointed with the end result. Have faith!
Date: May 10 2014 1:35 PM Title: Chapter 1
Next chapter is the final :(
Date: April 26 2014 10:35 PM Title: Chapter 17
What got me confused was the transition. One moment, Shaun isin't a bathroom, in deep shit, Zarelda frequently assaults him. Then, in the next moment in another chapter, he is rescued. After that, a bunch of characters get introduced, and while I'm trying to get clarity on their rules and positions and even remember their names, the story begins to limit Zarelda, a strong character actually being in the story, conversing with other characters. And while all this is happening, I begin to forget why and what exactly the protagonists are doing to stop her.
[Report This]Date: April 26 2014 9:28 PM Title: Chapter 19
The end is nigh...
Author's Response: ...or perhaps a new beginning
Date: April 26 2014 8:13 PM Title: Chapter 19
I feel like as this story has progressed, it has become more convoluted. Nice, but makes me think: "What the hell? Who the fuck is this? What happened to, eh, nevermind. Maybe it'll get clearer, or not."
I feel like the original, older chapters were much more immersive. I still like the story, but got so confused with the plot I got out of reading it.
Author's Response: Wow. I'm sorry that my story has confused you so much. This is the first complaint I have received saying this. I have to ask, what specifically has confused or not made sense? Your input would be greatly appreciated.
[Report This]Date: April 18 2014 11:26 PM Title: Chapter 18
Great stuff as always.
Date: April 18 2014 11:00 AM Title: Chapter 18
@Shrunken Scholar: Always glad to be of service.
[Report This]Date: April 18 2014 8:35 AM Title: Chapter 18
I decided to keep it short. Not a lot of action in this chapter, but things should pick up in the next chapter. It was still pretty interesting to read.
Constructive criticism is appreciated and enjoy! We're reaching the end! So soon? How much fifty+ foot Zarelda action are we going to get? This story has a lot of potential for plots and adventures once Zarelda's in a position to take over the area.
Author's Response: I've never been much for the " giantess destroying a city underfoot " genre. I knew that I wanted to touch on it in this story. Now that I have, I find that I like it more than I originally thought. And your review has given me a great idea, so thank you.
Date: April 10 2014 12:48 PM Title: Chapter 17
His life doesnt sound so bad to me?
I'm glad you're writing again.
Author's Response:
Thank you! That really means a lot coming from you. I love your stories and no it doesnt seem half bad to me either haha.
[Report This]Date: April 09 2014 8:14 PM Title: Chapter 17
Great to see this back.
[Report This]Date: April 09 2014 5:24 PM Title: Chapter 17
Welcome back. It's good to see this story continue. Are we going to get confirmation of what happened to David?
Author's Response: Yes, there will be confirmation of David's fate. And thank you
[Report This]Date: February 26 2014 8:23 AM Title: Chapter 16
Good chapter, we're moving forward now. Let's see what complications are in store.