Reviewer: vgiv Signed [Report This]
Date: March 23 2017 12:45 AM Title: Observation

The plot thickens.

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: March 22 2017 6:26 PM Title: Observation

This was so close to April that I thought this was going to be an April fools joke. (You should do one.)

But, I'm glad this was another quality chapter that had so much detail that we can discuss for hours.

Jack's deception of his parents is so true! While I wasn't that creative to warm myself up to make my body that hot, I would do a fake cough, or pretend to be asleep and trick my parents here and there. Good times.

I feel for Jack waiting for Penny's message. I once met a girl that I didn't express my love to, but I had her number and we would talk and soon, she didn't respond anymore. When a holiday came around, I would say "Happy (holiday)" and she still didn't respond. All these questions formed in my head, did she get a new phone, lost my number, didn't want to start a conversation, or what.

Penny has 1 pic on social media. That makes meeting her in person more special becuase or how little she is portrayed online. For Caitlin, her online page deceives everyone by thinking she is a super fun girl. And she probably is, but not for Jack. What he saw online contradicted what he faced with her in person.

It's 7, and it's too late for a message? Wow, people text me up to midnight.

That shower must have felt good. Wash away the pain, the dirt and the filth that his body has gone through. He can cleanse his body of that experience and start living a new chapter of his life.

I was wondering when Jack said he was looking for online videos, if maybe he found like a Caitlin sex-tape or soemthing. Hear me out. What if Caitlin was recording her scene with Jack on her bed and uploaded it secretly and Jack somehow stumbles on it. The video hurts Jack and the comments are even worse. Jack reads about people wishing to be in Jack's position and the worst part is Cailtin responding that she can have sessions with them and Jack is scared thinking that Caitlin is going to bring them to hell and those people won't be as lucky as they think they will be. (Plot twist maybe?)

The last few paragraphs have stumped me. What are you hinting at with this Caitlin is a year older stuff? I know some other readers might understand and get this hint, but I really want to figure it out. Intriguing.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Hey TomSpeedy, thanks for the review!

Just a couple of clarifications:

Penny doesn't have a mobile phone or a computer, she can only send a message by going to the library, which she probably can't do late on a Sunday.

It was a bath, not a shower, but essentially the same sort of cleansing, washing away of stuff kinda process.

The last bit is to do with when he guessed her password on the tablet back when he was trapped in her room. She's might be older than everyone thinks she is, which could be an important plot point... or not. Who knows?!

In terms of the sexy video idea, it's something I've had on the back burner since I started writing this story, the idea may come into play during the scope of GH-X2, but I won't say how, when or why!

~ Imagin8