Date: May 20 2016 4:30 AM Title: Revelation
I didn't saw the chiildhood backstory, it's well done. Thanks for these latest chapters. Enjoy your well deserved break. I hope to read u again soon.
Author's Response:
I take it you're saying you didn't see the childhood backstory coming? I hope that made it all the more interesting, anyway. Thank you, I will try and recharge my batteries now!
[Report This]Date: May 20 2016 2:02 AM Title: Revelation
Well done.
Author's Response:
Spanks.
[Report This]Date: May 20 2016 12:50 AM Title: Revelation
As I've said, as hard a job as it is you are certainly capable of being a published writer. I shall await the next installments with great anticipation. In the meantime, take care of yourself and be well.
~Johnny
[Report This]Date: May 19 2016 11:30 PM Title: Revelation
This chapter has hit me in the feels so hard. The fact that he was one happy and had a lot of friends only to lose it all was really depressing. Because of his parents stupid choice Jack has lived through a terrible school life. It hurts to know that even if Jack gets the girl his situation doesn't get any better.
Don't get me wrong, this is an amazing story but I don't remember ever being effected this much by just a few paragraphs in a story. I guess that's just a testament of how powerful the writing is.
I don't see what Jack has to offer Penny other than Nostalgia but hopefully they will both be happy.
ICan't wait for this story to continue one day.
Author's Response:
I love finding out what people think about my work, it's super flattering and a complete privilege. I do not write this for the feedback (there are much more cathartic reasons), but I adore getting it, and even though I know I'm really lucky to get a good number of reviews already I always crave MOAR, a bit like you guys would like MOAR of this story, and regrettably I can rarely provide it.
But yeah, this review, I saw it last night at silly 'o' clock and it made my heart swell with pride. I'm not gonna get all corny about it and say that this makes the effort I put into the story worthwhile, and all that sort of mush, but honestly, getting a review where someone has made a connection with something you've written and really 'got' what you were trying to get across - it's an awesome feeling.
As a more direct response to what you've put, lancealot501, it's entirely a matter of opinion whether his parents made a stupid choice, or a moral one done for the right reasons at the time. His folks are Betas, they appear to be relatively happy, why shouldn't their son be too? Perhaps it's a case of the world having moved on since they were young, and they were naive about how readily a Beta boy would be accepted in a country where nowadays almost everyone young is going to become an Alpha.
Also, Jack and Penny are not an item or anything. She's doing the right thing because she's a good person. He's a bit of a passenger at the moment, relying on Delon and two Alpha girls he barely knows to help him out of a horrible situation. He clearly has feelings for her, because she's the first Alpha to be so kind to him and it's overwhelming for him emotionally, but her feelings are harder to read.
[Report This]Date: May 19 2016 7:05 PM Title: Revelation
Double-whoa!!!!!
Author's Response:
Thanks x2 !
Seriously though, if you do have more feedback I'd love to hear it. The story's taken a big step.
[Report This]Date: May 19 2016 5:38 PM Title: Revelation
Wow, these past two chapters have seriously spiced up this story! I'm so glad that Jack is finally out of there, I almost wish we had a chapter JUST to see the expression on Caitlin's face! And this bit of backstory is great, I'm glad there's something more to Penny and Jack's relationship. Great stuff, it really sucks that's you're going into hiatus, I'm gonna miss this story!
Author's Response:
Thank you! I did feel like I was stringing things along with the Caitlin narrative a little bit (but that's actually what would happen, and I'm a slave to realism); it was just waiting for the opportunity to shake things up, and I wanted to do it as a kind of twist. The 'revelation' in the last chapter too, was hopefully an unexpected surprise, as there were only a couple of hints, if that, in the story that anything like that would happen.
The story is written from Jack's perspective entirely, so I'm sorry, you will not get to be a fly on the wall for Caitlin's reaction! Take it from me, though, she's not a happy camper.
[Report This]Date: May 19 2016 4:06 PM Title: Revelation
How can a backstory be so detailed?!! That was amazing! It just made their relationship so much deeper.
Karma is awesome. Jack saved Penny and now Penny saved Jack.
What a good note to take a break on. Well deserved.
I hope you come back soon. Enjoy your break!
Author's Response:
Thank you for your kind words!
Just for the sake of interest - the backstory is super detailed due to the way this story came to life; it evolved from a number of half-formed ideas I'd had for years and years, I just needed to refine these ideas down to one narrative that encapsulated everything I'd been thinking about. My first draft of GH-X2 actually had the revelation much much earlier, when Penny was walking Jack home, but I realised immediately how preposterous that was, for her to suddenly blurt it out like that unprovoked. As a writer, I just wanted that emotional hit to come straight in, as I felt like it was a really strong twist, but I knew that if I pushed it back to much later, and could take the story somewhere first, that it would have a more resonant impact. Ultimately, I ended up conceiving the kidnapping, and had to spend a long time figuring out how to make that fantasy scenario of being trapped around a dominant, but incredibly sexy girl work - writing erotic stuff well is actually much harder for me than working on the 'plot'... In the end, the stuff with Caitlin has ended up being the main body of this story, and that's cool with me - it's a major turn-on and, as I say, kind of wish-fulfillment, fantasy scenario stuff, but now the story has opened up again, it gives breathing room for a lot of the ideas I had at the start, but now with added drama and anticipation.
I've written short stories of debatable quality since my teenage years, some exploring the Penny role, and some exploring the Caitlin role, but this is the first time I've actually tried to make both sides work as part of a bigger narrative. It's because it's based on giantess, and real life musings I had back then, that this story is about 17-year-olds, and the drama revolves around that kind of not-adult, not-independent, but scared, confused, emotional, no-longer-innocent time in your life, that everyone claims is amazing, but I found quite daunting. I felt very insecure, especially with girls, and this just builds on that feeling, in a giantess NWO setting. This is what I would have written then, but never did.