Reviewer: Prodiginous Signed [Report This]
Date: February 03 2016 10:53 PM Title: Degradation

This story has been quite compelling, I never know where it will lead to next! I am on the edge of my seat and highly anticipating the next chapter(s).

~Johnny

Reviewer: rubber Signed [Report This]
Date: December 31 2015 8:41 AM Title: Degradation

another great chaper. i'm glad that this hasn't been abandoned.

Author's Response:

Thanks! I don't get round to this story often, but there's plenty more to come.

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: December 31 2015 1:01 AM Title: Degradation

Oh boy, it's been months since I have seen this story. Good thing the title is unique enough that I remembered that I follow it.

First off, this must be a Christmas gift to us, becuase this chapter is the best chapter in the entire story in my opinion.

It also wraps up 2015 in a way that makes me realize how many stories I have read on this site since this story's previous chapter. Glad you are back and happy holidays.

This chapter should've been called gratification or graduation becuase welcome to the club Jack, you just had your first sexual experience.

But let's just take a few steps back. We start with Caitlin and this ice that she places on Jack's shoulder. She knows that her pool party was a bit too much and I think she believes that she went too far this time and is pondering some thoughts as she tends to Jack.

I love the description you gave for Caitlin as she came from the pool. Her sillouette is all he can see as light flows around her. Jack must think she is like an angel at that point, the kind where light glows around them. Because Caitlin is now being gentle with Jaxk as she takes him to her kitchen counter.

Caitlin reminds me of a former coach I met. He was always being tough on his players. When Caitlin said "don't be a fucking wuss" or "don't get comfy", I got reminded of him. It's like she is training Jack for some thing.

Speaking of training, her brutal torture on Jack seemed to be a way of making Jack obedient to her. She wanted to enforce this idea constantly and did it in such a fashion that Jack is scared beyond measure and Caitlin wants Jack to feel helpless. As Jack suffers, Caitlin gains pleasure. She wants Jack to suffer mentally not physically, and that's the key difference between her torture and what happened at the pool party.

Caitlin then continues to surprise Jack by not just being a cruel girl that we have seen in the last 10 chapters. Last chapter, we saw some concern, now we learn some thing else. Caitlin wants Jack sexually. And not like romantic sex, this was brutal and forced like a type of female domination.

It all started when she transformed cruel to sexy with the ice cube. She uses ice on his groin, and that stuff hurts deeply I bet. Then she immediately heats things up (literally) by wrapping her hands around his dick and purring like a cat with her prey. (Imagine a giant girl wrapping your penis. Yeah, I know right.)

Now Jack starts freaking out in a way that I began laughing. Like, now his captor wants to play with him sexually and his mind is spinning like "what the hell is gonna happen?"

Then part 2 of this chapter begins and Caitlin gets naughty, like she is on the naughty list right now even though she got Jack in bed for Christmas becuase that is exactly what happened. She scares Jack by whispering seductively and I'm thinking "Jack is so lucky this chapter".

One thing that was kinda confusing was the positioning of these two during the bed scene, like I couldn't tell who was on top or bottom of what. At the end it was clear but when the scene stars, I had difficulty picturing it all enfold.

Caitlin could've tied Jack up with some tape or rope, but Caitlin manhandling Jack was even better. It just showed how much power and control she has. I mean, her hand alone keeps Jack from getting up. Wow. In addition, her legs wrapped him up like a doll. It felt like she was kinda squeezing him with her legs as you described her weight holding him down.

Lastly, thank you for including some good old facesitting in her. It is one of my favorite positions and you described it beautifully. Caitlin used his face for her own pleasure for the rest of the chapter and I wished it could have gone on longer, I mean that was fantastic.

Best chapter in this story so far in my opinion, and I can't wait for the next one.

Author's Response:

Quite a lot to respond to here!

First of all, very pleased you liked this chapter as it's an important one that took a lot of effort to write. It's the moment the whole story has been steadily building towards so at least there's a bit of closure there - the inevitable has happened.

It's called 'Degradation' because that's exactly what happens to Jack; there is no triumph or gratification in being abused in this manner. Whilst it is a sexual experience for Caitlin, it is a thoroughly traumatic one for him, there's nothing for him to celebrate.

You have done a lot of analysis into the characters' motivations and subtext, and for the most part you're along the right lines, though there is no 'one way' to interpret things. Jack probably wouldn't think of Caitlin as an angel for even a second, however, and she would not care whether his anguish was mental or physical so long as she got what she wanted. The face-sitting in particular is written to be primarily erotic, so yes, he is lucky in some way, but if you were put in that situation in real life, it would probably be deeply distressing, and I'm trying to reflect that too.

I'm sorry you found the positioning confusing, I've tried to be quite descriptive without the detail overwhelming the actions. I've read it back and I think it's fairly clear what's going on at all times, maybe a re-read might flow better? I also agree that him being unbound and naked gives a different dimension to the interaction from earlier chapters, which is quite deliberate I assure you - I don't want to repeat the same scenarios over and over!

Finally, thank you for taking the time to give such comprehensive feedback, it's nice to see how other people interpret your work and I've really enjoyed going through your thought processes.

~ Imagin8

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: December 30 2015 7:00 PM Title: Degradation

Loving this story. I'm actually hoping for some form of justice for Jack, but as Caitlyn said, the world isn't always fair...But what a bitch though, using that as an excuse for using and abusing him like he was nothing.

Author's Response:

Karma is a long way off - if it even exists for Jack at all.