[Report This]Date: October 28 2013 5:36 PM Title: Final Destination
do some feet deaths next.
Author's Response:
i will be doing a foot death but the next chapter is going to be toilet. there might be some feet death sprinkled in the chapters but you might have to wait a chapter or two until you get a whole chapter devoted to this death.
Date: October 27 2013 11:12 AM Title: Final Destination
I would love to see a bare skin butt crush, Like the 2 girls who are sun batheing find an ant hill (and shruken people) and challenge each other to see who can butt crush the most ants with bare Bums.
Date: October 27 2013 12:54 AM Title: Final Destination
I have a few questions.
1) Will you ever continue your other story, and if so when?
2) Are these characters based off people you know in real life? I'm just wondering since you use these same characters (or at least the same names anyway) in both of your stories.
3) I asked this question in a review on your other story, but you never answered. What exactly do these girls look like? You never seem to have elaborated on that. To many readers that would probably be a pointless detail, but I would like to know because it helps to visualize things more clearly.
And with those questions out of the way, I think I have a suggestion or two... you mention an ant invasion? Well, since you haven't done anything with Rebecca yet, how about this... kids that age like to pick stuff up off the ground and put it in their mouth, right? So how about she sees the ants which are attacking the tiny people, and she starts eating the ants. And since the tiny people are caught in the mix, they get grabbed up and eaten too? Then after this goes on for a bit perhaps the mom sees what's going on and she could respond in one of two ways. Either she thinks its cute and harmless since they are just ants, or she is concerned about germs and puts a stop to it by deliberately squishing them out. I would love to see the 40 year old mom deliberately squash out a crowd of ants under her bikini clad ass and not realize that some of them are actually tiny people..
Or, how about this... if she thinks her daughter eating the ants is cute she might want to record it, so what if she pulls out her phone to record it and let's say there is some drool coming out of Rebecca's mouth and the mother zooms in on that and notices there's a tiny woman in a bikini trapped in the drool... but that would obviously end the whole "unaware" aspect of the story, but it would then open up a lot of possibilities because then she could either save the tiny person, or watch as they either plummet to the ground or get swallowed down Rebecca's gullet to their demise...
Just a few ideas for you to consider.
Author's Response:
first: i don't want to remove the "unaware" aspect of this story because that is why i made it. this is where i put all my "unaware" ideas and if i changed that then i'd have to make a new story when i made another unaware idea and it would be a hassle. having said that, i think you Rebecca idea is really good and i'm going to think on that one for a while, thanks for the idea. right now she is just snoozing on the chair near kate so it might be nice to get her some action.
second: yeah i'll continue the other story but i don't know when. i have found that writing "unaware" stories are just easier because it has much less charater interation and more simple action. it is just easier to come up with the story and write it out and make it sound good. whenever i muster the will to write (i've found that writing actually takes a lot of mental energy) and continue a story i steer towards this story because it takes less mental energy. in other words i'm lazy. if you really want another chapter i could write one but it might take a little longer then it would take to write on of these chapters.
third: no, these characters are not based of anyone i know i real life. if i did that then i would be thinking about them when writing it and would creep myself out. i don't think i could ever write about someone i know in the way i write these stories. these characters are the same as teh one in my other story because, once again, i am lazy. i didn't want to come up with a bunch of new characters with different traits when i already have some. each character has a specific trait or role which i distinguish them by (being mean, cute, dominant, submissive, role model, lazy) i tell my characters a part by the traits i give them.
four: sorry, i didn't realize you had asked that on my other story or maybe i have forgotten about it. i don't know why i wouldn't have told you. their appearance go like this.
rebecca: short brown hair, round pudgy face, pudgy baby body. as she is a baby there aren't that many characterisics.
amy: medium height for her age. long black hair (lower back length). a light clear face with no visable defining marks. i imagine her with a happy smile.
Stacy: slgihtly taller for her age. neck length dark brown hair. a "strong face" (however you might picture that). i imagine her with a determined look.
emma: medium height for her age. long brown/ reddish hair (lower back length). she has a few freckles on her face which are a defining feature and a bright blue eyes. her look would be that of a person who is content with just helping people and doesn't like to take charge too much. whatever look that might be.
Kate: long black hair similar to Amy's. a strong face with a clear complection. she is slight taller for her height. her look is of a person who likes to take charge (probably because she grew up raising her sisters) but also fair.
jane- the mother: she has long black hair. tallish for her age and is slender for her age as well. her look is a mixture between confused and hurried. because she works so many jobs she is always flastered and that has developed into my mental appearance of her. that is why i imagine her to be the worried one of the group because she is always anxious about her work.
the family is white. each person is thin but not super skinny. breast size of those with them is modest. good size but now abnoxious size. they are a fit looking family who look quite healthy except the mother who is a bit stressed.
sorry if that isn't as much help as you wanted as i am not really good at describing features and simply relaying how i feel they look in my mind. if you have any questions simply ask. sorry ofr the super long response. i tend to over explain sometimes. if you truly want another chapter in TOASS then i'll try to get around to it.
[Report This]Date: October 26 2013 11:23 PM Title: Final Destination
Love these chapters. Maybe a toilet death?
Author's Response:
i like you idea. i have been considering doing such things but i also have to lead up to it. also, not everyone likes that stuff but i guaranteethere will be a chapter with that in it.