Date: August 14 2013 4:10 PM Title: A Weekend Alone
Alrighty, so here goes, I like this story, a lot. You have some great dialouge, no spelling errors, and your descriptions are perfect. My only problem with this chapter is, that even though it was a dream sequence and doesn't really count as an actual event in the story, it still felt like I was just thrown in and suddenly pulled back out. Maybe for the actual interactions with the soon to be shrunken ellis you take things a bit more slowly? Just a suggestion of course, and honestly I love your writing style, on top of it all you're going into a scenario that almost no one on here does, so I applaud you sir, keep this up!
Thank you for the review, I'll take all your points into consideration for when I do full stories, but as for the shortness, this was intended to be a in/out affair with it being such a short story. I only posted it to see if anyone would like a full story involving ideas like this.
Thank you for the very valid points and again, thanks for the review and I'm glad you enjoyed the story! :D