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Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: March 23 2016 10:51 PM Title: Chapter 12

Great chapter! It'll be interesting to see how Tim does in this society of tiny people!



Author's Response:

I'm glad you liked this chapter.. This story is intended to go all over the place and not be limited to a bedroom.   So be prepared for a lot of twists and turns. :)

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed [Report This]
Date: March 23 2016 7:36 AM Title: Chapter 1

I hope you find the inspiration to write the next chapters soon. The story was already very good, now things get very interesting.



Author's Response:

Working on it right now as a matter of fact Barrowman. ;)

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed [Report This]
Date: March 15 2016 11:37 PM Title: Chapter 1

For Wendy this is also a good lesson. The longer he is gone, the more she will learn. What she do with it is up to her. The fact that he wants nothing to do with her will even eventually sink in with a 14 year old girl.
Yes that toughen up part for Tim will be interesting. But even that hard life or death is better than living in a LPGO controlled environment.

 



Author's Response:

I'd would agree with you on every point that you made Barrowman.    I think Tim is very lucky in the respect of meeting somebody his first hour out of the house.  As I'm well aware of the old axiom, of - The problem with running, is that you eventually find out that there's nowhere to run to.

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed [Report This]
Date: March 15 2016 9:23 AM Title: Chapter 1

Can't wait. I look forward to this new setting. The outside world. Let's see how that feels like for a shrunken person.



Author's Response:

Full of dangers from unknowns and knowns alike. ;)

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 15 2016 1:12 AM Title: Chapter 11

Very interesting development. The fight for freedom continues.
Love this story. I hope Tim succeeds in his quest. The best way to punish someone is to let them suffer with doubt of not knowing you are alive or dead for a long time. That they never hear from you again. His mom deserves that kind of pain. I would deliver it. Now break that suit in pieces and burn it.

 

 



Author's Response:

I agree with you about being missing is worse than being dead.  With a death at leat you know.  Tim's going to have problems of his own soon enough but he will have to toughen up a bit if he's going to survive in this new world that he finds himself in.   And yes, some things will have to be dispersed with. The sooner the better. :)

Reviewer: diesel Signed [Report This]
Date: March 14 2016 7:49 PM Title: Chapter 11

Enjoyed this chapter as well. Sheila handles him well. Love when she talks about him like he is not there. Like a pet or an object.
So who are the new men and how do they fit in? I can hardly wait to see where this goes.
Why doesn't Wendy just use her device to catch him? He can't be 5 miles away.
Love it, love Wendy,
Diesel

Author's Response:

If you re-read the end of the chapter when she get's off the phone, she goes back to the house to get the locating device delegating Sheila to search for him in the meantime.

As to who the guys are.. I've already spoiled that surprise if you look at my response to Carycomic. ;)

I'm glad that you liked this chapter as well.. Not all of them are going to be so GTS intensive as I wanted to give the story a bit more background development so that it isn't smothered or one dimensional in GTS.. But please hang in there while that happens Diesel!

Reviewer: diesel Signed [Report This]
Date: March 14 2016 10:36 AM Title: Chapter 1

Wendy is very cute, yet totally in charge. Love her as a character.
Great writing,
Diesel

Author's Response:

Thanks again Diesel.  Wendy will soon have to shar the limelight. :)

Reviewer: diesel Signed [Report This]
Date: March 14 2016 8:59 AM Title: Chapter 10

Love the LPGO guide. Great stuff. You have a vivid imagination. Wendy is great. Love her attitude. I like the way she talks to Tim. Always preparing him for his new life. Soooooo glad to see this story continue.
Excellent,
Diesel

Author's Response:

I should have some more very soon Diesel so hang in there for the next chaper as things are about to change in it. ;)

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 14 2016 2:20 AM Title: Chapter 1

Interesting. You're continuing again. Let see where this goes.

 



Author's Response:

I should have some more soon Barrowman.

Reviewer: The Reviewer Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 25 2016 12:16 AM Title: Chapter 9

Overpowering him unawarely with the smell of her feet and all this by a younger girl? This humiliation is turning me on beyond my imagination..

I'm following this story with big expectations. Thanks for this really.



Author's Response:

Well, I hope I don't let you down The Reviewer in that case.   More on the way very soon. :)

Reviewer: takuoni Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: July 31 2015 12:52 AM Title: Chapter 1

This story seems so realistic. Well done !

I hope the babysitter will let him play with her.. if you know what i mean



Author's Response:

Thanks a lot for the vote to realism Takuoni!

Reviewer: diesel Signed [Report This]
Date: July 21 2015 5:55 PM Title: Chapter 9

Love the collar. What is the LPGO device that is coming? Sharon is great. Love the flick of the behind. I would love to see a chapter of her capturing little people. Does she use a net or a box trap. Great writing, love the story.
Later,
Diesel

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review Diesel.. I'm sure all will be revealed in good time. :)

Reviewer: Moonpie Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 21 2015 6:09 AM Title: Chapter 1

I thought wendy was going to be like a sister or mother type twords tim but i thought wrong. Seems like shes slowly becoming power drunk. Im glad this story is back by the way.

Author's Response:

I think you'll still see elements of that..  But I just figured that the temptation to overpower at her inexperience age would be too great a psychological feat to master.

Thank you for writing a review Moonpie... Love your name. :)

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed [Report This]
Date: July 20 2015 12:55 PM Title: Chapter 1

Thanks for making that clear on the size front. :) ;)

About Wendy's age. I was 99% sure of the reason you just explained. But asked anyway to make sure. ;) The story wouldn't work well with a Wendy that starts off as 11 years old or 17. Tim's age of 20 years old is also not randomly chosen.

Governments who act like surrogate parents. Very disturbingly present in my country.

"But I've come to believe that I'm writing more for the reader than for myself to the extent or ratio that I give them the best of what they want yet keeping enough independence to not give them only what they want which I believe ultimately yields you a better product than the inverse method that many writers insist upon which I diverge from."

That sounds good. Seeing the details and hints in the story. I'm convinced it wil be a satisfying journey and ending.

Glad to review and read this story. 



Author's Response:

Thanks again Barrowman.. From the way it's look it might just turn out to be just me and you on this journey I fear, He, he, he.

But so be it if that comes to be true.  I'm just glad that I've got this one going again and I have a clear idea of how it will progress and ultimately end.  I think it'll be worth your effort. :)

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed [Report This]
Date: July 19 2015 12:45 AM Title: Chapter 1

@Crocodile.

I'm interested what the writer thinks too, when he/she writes his/her story. I don't want to write every possible outcome I can think of in my review when the story isn't finished, because I want to see the writers point of view and thoughts and don't want to ruin it for other readers.

Important is that this world is believable if 1% srhinks to 3 inch and the characters point of view are understandable. Also important is how much I can relate with certain choices of the characters.

The anger/emotion it gives is indeed also important as you mentioned, because I see the same type of rotten behaviour, dumb people and overbearing governments in the real world. Telling you that it is for your own good and that they care about you. Betrayal by a friend/family member/loved one is an absolute NO in my world. That is an act I almost never forgive.

It may change, but at this point, I only care about the wellbeing of the characters Tim and Wendy. It occured to me that Tim hasn't done one very important thing yet. But it looks like he's doing it gradually so far.

By the way. Did you deliberately choose the 3 inch height for this story or is that your favorite height/size for every story with shrunken people in it? The age of 14 year old Wendy and not 11 or 17 is probably on purpose.

 



Author's Response:

I'm in complete agreement with you about our governments overstepping their bounds in the attempt to become the surrogate parents of a race of people who no longer need any such thing. I could go off on a very long diatribe about such manners and tend to do so but will spare the readers the boredom as I know they don't want to get their political science from me. he, he.

I had a very nice sophisticated response to your question as to why I picked 3 inches but the page silently logged me out so when I tried to post it, thereby barring me and therefore lost the response totally. Let me see if I can try again.... I chose that size for the following reasons as it is not my favorite height either... When a beer brewery chooses a signature lager (although this is not so much the case these days as it used to be) they attempt to smooth out the peaks and valleys of that taste at the expense of losing the more cultured palates to the blanded taste buds of the masses in the interests of maximizing profits knowing full well that they could make a better beer if they so chose to do so but default to the former for monetary concerns.

Now, I've heard some writers here state that they write for themselves.. And that's fine for them and I wish them the best of luck with that philosophy too. But I've come to believe that I'm writing more for the reader than for myself to the extent or ratio that I give them the best of what they want yet keeping enough independence to not give them only what they want which I believe ultimately yields you a better product than the inverse method that many writers insist upon which I diverge from. Perhaps there's a metaphysical reason pertaining to service to self and service to others which if I go to deeply into may hurt some feelings amongst my contemporaries so will ask you to forgive me for not divulging further into that hint.

As to Wendy's age I chose 14 because that is typically (although not always) when a female begins to show her flowers which means that she has the equipment but does not yet possess the experience or wisdom to use it properly, which typically leads to many mistakes which our protagonist must endure leading us to an abundance of poor choices that give us the travesties which I'm all to happy to pick and choose from.

This was another great review from you Barrowman! I truly appreciate your bravery in doing such if going by the viewership to review ratios are sadly any true measure to go by.

I truly look forward to your next one!

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed [Report This]
Date: July 18 2015 4:26 PM Title: Chapter 1

@crocodile

Totally agree with you on every word.

 



Author's Response:

He, he, well thanks again then Barrowman!

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed [Report This]
Date: July 18 2015 3:06 PM Title: Chapter 9

It would be good if the small people eventually set a trap for Sharon and put her on fire and is left severly handicapped with third degree burns. That character doesn't deserve better. She is like Damon Killian from "The Running Man". ;)

The extra creepy part is put in to play for Tim. ;) Wendy, isn't Wendy anymore but a government tool from the moment that toolkit for shrunken people came into play. Trainend and conditioned to think like the governments in our real lifes. Wanting total control over you and dehumanize you as much as possible. This is the point where Wendy also becomes a victim of the dehumanizing process. Now we can see how strong or weak Tim and/or Wendy are.

Good detail of what's developing, crocodile. Your chapters are good. Not lingering too long on the fetish, but on the drama and stress that are developing. Can't wait for the next chapter.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the words Barrowman. I'm glad that it's giving you some anger. The best stories always seem to anger their readers in some way. :)

Personally I try to never make a fetish story. That's pretty much a one dimensional ploy that doesn't ever lead anywhere. And get's boring in a fraction of that time. Those kind of stories dd have their place and time howerver.. I'm just not in to them anymore or have been for going on decades now.

I think if the person approaches things from the attitude of "I'm expressing myself artistically and I plan on writing a story that just so happens to have an altered size ratio theme to boot, then the chips may fall randomly and make for much more entertainment for the reader and writer alike.

Thanks again Barrowman!

Reviewer: diesel Signed [Report This]
Date: July 18 2015 3:07 AM Title: Chapter 8

Looks like she has him. Will his hiding place be good enough? Wendy is a smart Giantess. The modern age is working against him. Love the new gadgets. They are only for his own good. Will his Giantess Mother eventually use them?
Nice story,
Diesel

Author's Response:

Thanks for commenting once again on this story Diesel... I was wondering if you'd make a call to it once I got it rolling again and am delighted to see that you have not let me down.

Welcome back Diesel and happy to see you again. ;)

Reviewer: diesel Signed [Report This]
Date: July 18 2015 2:51 AM Title: Chapter 7

Excellent chapter.The orange suit idea is logical. It will lead to his safety. Will he see the light or will his anger get the best of him. Very realistic idea. Being small for Wendy would be nice.

Author's Response:

I'm glad you like the idea of the fluorescent colors all in the spirit of keeping those afflicted from possibly getting underfoot. :)

Reviewer: Falconjudge Signed [Report This]
Date: July 17 2015 12:31 AM Title: Chapter 1

EH... I'm actually not at all sympathetic towards the little dude.  He's... well, he's an adult, but he acts like a bratty (and not especially intelligent) child...



Author's Response:

I suppose a person could regress just a bit should they loose their stature and status in life like he has..  They might even revert a little bit.

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