[Report This]Date: February 22 2018 7:01 PM Title: Chapter 13
you have him acting like a six year old instead of a young adult he seemed like a spoiled brat I didn't like him why put a mother in the story and make her uncareing and take her out of the story.
Author's Response:
Perhaps you can do much better Mad Dog.. ;)
[Report This]Date: April 11 2016 8:15 PM Title: Chapter 13
This story did a good job on hitting the parts of being shrunk most people don't think about. The sheer horror the tiny men must have felt as they were forced to watch giants use the restroom was palpable. I was on the edge of my seat as I waited to see if anyone was caught or not! I also find myself wondering what happened to Mark that was taken recently. Your writing gets me to wonder even about recently added characters. I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thank you Hopier.
You have not heard the last of Mark I assure you. Yes the sheer terror indeed. ;)
Date: March 28 2016 3:16 AM Title: Chapter 13
You really get a feel of what it is like to be small. The blending in idea works very well. It was terrifying enough when the kids come in but then Mom also. So far so good, they are safe.
His light is also coming in handy. They really have a precise operation going on. A very enjoyable chapter. I definitely look forward to this story.
Later,
Diesel
Author's Response:
Thanks a lot Diesel.. I figured his tool would be a good way to gain favor with the other men after the unfortunate incident where Mark is captured.
The next chatper will be a little more graphic so please stay tuned. ;)
[Report This]Date: March 28 2016 3:06 AM Title: Chapter 13
Very detailed recordings of every feeling Tim has in that bathroom with 3 giants doing the most normal things in the world, but for him every action they make or only their presence is epic. How insignificant he feels be every bodypart of even the children. Everything is mindblowing to him. This whole threatening feeling throughout the story and the feeling of helplessness, loss of freedom and it took absolutely no violence or even people with the intent to hurt Tim. It took the normal people no effort at all to make Tim feel that way. A mother, a 14 year old girl, another 14 year old girl and woman and 2 six year old children, some TV shows doing essentialy no physical harm whatsoever. But on the mental front it's very subtlely and slowly having a huge effect. The choices of the characters are believable and relatable. That makes that story enjoyable and you really feel for the characters.
Author's Response:
I feel that citing how I would react to that situation is the best way that I can portray it. I'm very glad that you liked this chaper too becaue it is a deviation from the rest of the story. Just glad that I didin't loose you along the way Barrowman!!!!!
Thanks again for yet another insiteful review that covers just about everthing that happened! Sometimes I feel that a person need only read your review of my chapter as a kind of Cliff Notes and can just bypass my chapter all together with being content or to have read it just by reading your review! he, he.