[Report This]Date: June 19 2013 1:28 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Not part of the routine
AH, what can I say? Other than the short length of the story overall, and of the steamy parts, this story was awesome! I especially like that you didn't dicriminate between the male and female characters, as this is over, I can't wait to see your next story pop up on here to see what improvements you might make!
Date: June 19 2013 3:10 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Not part of the routine
Amazing masterpiece !
Date: June 18 2013 2:02 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Not part of the routine
Ive tried once and it went really bad. I'm not nativly English speaking and it results in unpleasend stories... That would be just fantastic actually (:
Author's Response:
I see, well do what you will, you seem to have some very good ideas nonetheless.
Date: June 18 2013 1:37 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Not part of the routine
You can use any idea you want :3 I'm not into giant(ess)/growing stories, but I will read every unaware micro story of yours. Did you plan on writing unaware vore too? Humiliation, unaware, insertion, vore, also tf, these are my favorite topics, always with a shrinking size of 1/16-1/4". My favorite male interactions are like I said before, when it's a younger brother like you did in that chapter, it was mostly already perfectly setup, age, family connection, but also best friend, or a combination. So I was a little sad you said you would end the story :3 I also liked the idea you used how the shrunken character came close to Alex, that he was in the panties, and Alex sniffed at it. I would love to see a scenario, where a boy would wear a boxer the character is in, in the scrotch area but then gets into the backside area too, and because the pants are tight he would get shoved in. I would like things too like pen anal play, with insertion, but also vore. Would you consider doing character death too? I would find it really fascinating for example, if after a very humiliating act, like you did with Alex, a brother or best friends masturbates, the shrunken character maybe gets cought in a single sperm drop, and it glides slowly down direction anus. After some scretching, he would get shoved in, could escape after a toilette part, and later would end in a cereal and gulped down, going through digestion. I'm into most of it, so not much I don't like, except growing :3 And Im also not much into aware too.
Author's Response:
sounds like you should be writing this sort of stuff, you have it very clear what you want to read.
I'm going to try to do as many things as I can, though I've never really of doing character death but I suppose that would go along with vore and crush, so yeah I'll be doing pretty much all of what you've suggested, maybe not exactly how you stated it but I've already thought of several ways I can use these ideas, so just keep a look out and hopefully I'll produce a story that includes things that tickle your fancy.
Date: June 18 2013 1:00 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Not part of the routine
Thank you for your respons. I see, I didnt know you had planed to end it in the next chapter, never mind (: And that you will write other stories too is even better. I added you a a fvaorite author. I have to say I am into both, unaware female and male, so I am always glad auhtor include both in their stories, not just females. I like the idea of a male being vored or inserted by another male, and if he's even younger, a family member, or best friend or brother, a lot, because I find the idea even mure humiliating for the shrunken character, than "just" if it was a female doing it to him.
Author's Response:
No problem, I like the feedback. Don't worry, I'll be trying out a variety of ideas in the future and see how well I do with them. I've read a lot of other people's work and I've seen how people have responded, so I'll be sure to try writing as much as I can. I'll be having stories with just females and some with just males, unaware stories and humiliation stories, growth and shrink. I'll be trying out the lot.
thanks for taking the time to read my work, I haven't really done this before so I'm hoping I can keep afloat in this community.
And I hope you don't mind if I use some of the ideas you've mentioned in later works.
Date: June 07 2013 12:05 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Not part of the routine
Awesome storyline, please keep it coming!
Author's Response:
I'll try my best!
[Report This]Date: June 04 2013 11:29 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Not part of the routine
I like the story over all, but a bit of a longer intro before jumpingstraight into the action would have been nice. A few errors here and there, something every author, even myself, can't help, and the giant male aspect is a nice change, not a lot of that on here. Keep it up and maybe make the chapters longer?
-Jake
Author's Response:
Thanks for the constructive critiscism, I really appreciate it. I'll take your advice and go back and lengthen the introduction, That way the story won't seem so... general, I guess the word is. I didn't really paint the picture of what the house or his parents look like all that well, so I'll be sure to do that too.
I will work towards making longer chapters, thanks for the heads up on that too.