[Report This]Date: June 19 2013 1:28 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Not part of the routine
AH, what can I say? Other than the short length of the story overall, and of the steamy parts, this story was awesome! I especially like that you didn't dicriminate between the male and female characters, as this is over, I can't wait to see your next story pop up on here to see what improvements you might make!
[Report This]Date: June 19 2013 8:02 AM Title: Chapter 7 - Day's End
I feel that this story was too short and didn't have enough depth. I wish that the chapters were longer and more involved. This story was ok for being done in such a short time. I am a fan of the shrunkern son/brother genre and love your ideas. I just believe that it would be better if you expanded on these ideas and had more involvment. Finally, I like it most when the brother/son is unwilling. Just something you may want to think about. There are alot of people that like the unwilling seen. Hope my comment was helpful and not hurtful to you. I seems like you have good potential.
Author's Response:
Not hurtful at all, and yes this story was short, it was pretty much me just getting something out there, I didn't plan it out or anything before I wrote it so that's why it's kinda... iffy in some places. I didn't really expand on the ideas presented in the story, and I understand not everyone enjoys what I enjoy so I'm going to be trying to write and accomodate many people in the future rather than people who just happen to be like me.
Thanks for the coment, every bit helps.
Date: June 19 2013 3:10 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Not part of the routine
Amazing masterpiece !
Date: June 19 2013 1:02 AM Title: Chapter 7 - Day's End
Happy to see he didn't die in the end. I'm a fan of sister/mother stuff so please do more incest stories.
Date: June 18 2013 8:43 PM Title: Chapter 7 - Day's End
Since You mentioned some "ambitious" plans in the end notes, I think this deserves a bit longer review.
Honestly, these seven chapters were a cheap porn, nothing more - zero emotions, hardly any descriptions, absolutely no plot, basically nothing outside some hints of what have happened and leaving the rest for the readers to imagine.
I'm not saying that's bad and obviously You weren't aiming higher, so no disappointment there. The sole fact that I even got so far suggests it was somehow enjoyable - although I think it was not a "story", as You so generously put it.
As for any future works, well... You have a choice right now - continue this path and manufacture more of the same or try to write something actually ambitious.
Personally I hope for the latter, but it seems most readers around here just want the simple stuff. Not trying to judge, merely stating an observation.
Author's Response:
I agree, when I was writing this I didn't think much about anything other than just getting the action parts out, so yes I would agree that this is less of a story with meaning and more of just some quickly typed up porn. Honestly I didn't try with this, I had ideas that I'd thought of and I quickly put them into a situation that somewhat worked in order to write them out without it making no sense at all.
Perhaps I'm simply no good at writing about emotions or anything like that, maybe I'm all bang, I have no idea yet, I don't do this sort of thing often. I definetly had very little description, and I knew that halfway through writing.
Well, just have to acknowledge the flaws and work on it I guess, I'm glad you took the time to tell me your thoughts on this, and maybe the readers here only do want simple stuff, maybe that's all I'm really good at.
I guess we'll find out. Thanks again.
Date: June 18 2013 5:36 PM Title: Chapter 7 - Day's End
Awesome Story. Please more like it. Great writing.
Date: June 18 2013 2:02 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Not part of the routine
Ive tried once and it went really bad. I'm not nativly English speaking and it results in unpleasend stories... That would be just fantastic actually (:
Author's Response:
I see, well do what you will, you seem to have some very good ideas nonetheless.
Date: June 18 2013 1:37 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Not part of the routine
You can use any idea you want :3 I'm not into giant(ess)/growing stories, but I will read every unaware micro story of yours. Did you plan on writing unaware vore too? Humiliation, unaware, insertion, vore, also tf, these are my favorite topics, always with a shrinking size of 1/16-1/4". My favorite male interactions are like I said before, when it's a younger brother like you did in that chapter, it was mostly already perfectly setup, age, family connection, but also best friend, or a combination. So I was a little sad you said you would end the story :3 I also liked the idea you used how the shrunken character came close to Alex, that he was in the panties, and Alex sniffed at it. I would love to see a scenario, where a boy would wear a boxer the character is in, in the scrotch area but then gets into the backside area too, and because the pants are tight he would get shoved in. I would like things too like pen anal play, with insertion, but also vore. Would you consider doing character death too? I would find it really fascinating for example, if after a very humiliating act, like you did with Alex, a brother or best friends masturbates, the shrunken character maybe gets cought in a single sperm drop, and it glides slowly down direction anus. After some scretching, he would get shoved in, could escape after a toilette part, and later would end in a cereal and gulped down, going through digestion. I'm into most of it, so not much I don't like, except growing :3 And Im also not much into aware too.
Author's Response:
sounds like you should be writing this sort of stuff, you have it very clear what you want to read.
I'm going to try to do as many things as I can, though I've never really of doing character death but I suppose that would go along with vore and crush, so yeah I'll be doing pretty much all of what you've suggested, maybe not exactly how you stated it but I've already thought of several ways I can use these ideas, so just keep a look out and hopefully I'll produce a story that includes things that tickle your fancy.
Date: June 18 2013 1:00 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Not part of the routine
Thank you for your respons. I see, I didnt know you had planed to end it in the next chapter, never mind (: And that you will write other stories too is even better. I added you a a fvaorite author. I have to say I am into both, unaware female and male, so I am always glad auhtor include both in their stories, not just females. I like the idea of a male being vored or inserted by another male, and if he's even younger, a family member, or best friend or brother, a lot, because I find the idea even mure humiliating for the shrunken character, than "just" if it was a female doing it to him.
Author's Response:
No problem, I like the feedback. Don't worry, I'll be trying out a variety of ideas in the future and see how well I do with them. I've read a lot of other people's work and I've seen how people have responded, so I'll be sure to try writing as much as I can. I'll be having stories with just females and some with just males, unaware stories and humiliation stories, growth and shrink. I'll be trying out the lot.
thanks for taking the time to read my work, I haven't really done this before so I'm hoping I can keep afloat in this community.
And I hope you don't mind if I use some of the ideas you've mentioned in later works.
[Report This]Date: June 18 2013 10:35 AM Title: Chapter 6 - Don't Rock the Boat Baby
I really enjoyed this story so far, and chapter 6 was the best in my taste. I hope to see the Alex character return and have another part in the story. For my taste the story lacks a bitte lit of plot and intruging situations, "it just happens not enough". I would had liked it for example if James would had got into serious troubles, things getting worse for him. The whole idea od unaware is this about in my opinion. Maybe Alex returns to the bed for another quick round, and sits near or on top of the place where James was left behind. I would love to see Alex maybe play around with a dildo or pen too, and James could get inserted accidentally in his bum. But so far I will follow the story, keep up the good work.
Author's Response:
Well this story is coming to a close, however, I've said it before and I'll say it again, I'm going to be writing many more stories that will all most likely have different situations in it. I probably will be finishing this up in about the next chapter, but I'll be moving right along to another story that will cover different ideas. I had planned to put in some male insertion, but I'm thinking I'll leave that to a story based around a shrunken man and two unaware gays. Stick around, lots of stuff will be coming from me, and hopefully if I don't end up writing something that really peaks your interest in this story, a future one will.
[Report This]Date: June 17 2013 3:09 PM Title: Chapter 5 - cave explorer
You're going to end it soon? Aw man, we just got to the huge reeking socks of his sister. Give us more of that, his sister, and her panties.
Author's Response:
I plan on writing more stories, most of them will be based on one idea rather than jumping around to different ones. This one is more based on giant couples or more mainly, giant males, but I will have more stories more heavily based on vore or crush and thos other sorts of things, so if this doesn't end up tickling your fancy, I'll probably end up writing a separate story based around something else such as growing giants rather than shrinking people.
Date: June 13 2013 8:11 PM Title: Chapter 3 - Flight of the Concords
I LOVE this story. Please continue. Incest is a favorite theme of mine and this is now one of my favorite stories.
[Report This]Date: June 08 2013 5:49 AM Title: Chapter 4 - Bed Trek
Nice porn, keep them coming.
[Report This]Date: June 07 2013 12:06 PM Title: Chapter 2 - up close and personal
CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER!!
Author's Response:
I'm working on it, I have school and whatnot to attend but I will try to update and add to it in my free time, don't worry, I don't plan on dropping the entire story or anything, I have intent on finishing it in some way. Maybe it'll get a sequel if enough people like it...
Date: June 07 2013 12:05 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Not part of the routine
Awesome storyline, please keep it coming!
Author's Response:
I'll try my best!
[Report This]Date: June 04 2013 11:29 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Not part of the routine
I like the story over all, but a bit of a longer intro before jumpingstraight into the action would have been nice. A few errors here and there, something every author, even myself, can't help, and the giant male aspect is a nice change, not a lot of that on here. Keep it up and maybe make the chapters longer?
-Jake
Author's Response:
Thanks for the constructive critiscism, I really appreciate it. I'll take your advice and go back and lengthen the introduction, That way the story won't seem so... general, I guess the word is. I didn't really paint the picture of what the house or his parents look like all that well, so I'll be sure to do that too.
I will work towards making longer chapters, thanks for the heads up on that too.