[Report This]Date: June 07 2013 6:35 PM Title: Day 4 Concluded
I think that, by the end of the next chapter, there's going to be an exchange of prisoners. And, Minnie will find herself going "the other way."
Of course, I've been wrong before.
Author's Response:
We will definitely see
Date: May 28 2013 11:27 PM Title: Ethan
Im actually missing Lori being a GTS, shes my favorite from the ones introduced thus far..
Author's Response:
Well don't worry. Lori will be again. I promise
[Report This]Date: May 28 2013 7:08 PM Title: Day 4 Continued still
This might sound politically incorrect. But, I sure hope Minnie knows some kung fu. Because, something tells me she's going to need it, come the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Haha, the next chapter will indeed be very interesting. She has stolen what both Lori and Marta hold dearest in this world and who knows what lengths they will go to, to get him back.
[Report This]Date: May 21 2013 10:32 AM Title: Day 4 Continued
Great chapter and story so far. I'm wondering if Minnie's planning on taking him home or sharing him with others. I actually find the Lori character pretty flat and pedantic, so I'm glad she's not prominent. Hopefully something keeps her out the story or she ends up shrunk herself. The idea of subservience to various hired help is much more original and intriguing. Anyways, it's your story and I'll read it regardless. Keep it up.
Author's Response:
Thanks. I have thought about Lori ending up small and we will just see how this plays out.
Thanks for the comment and glad to hear you are enjoying it.
Date: May 20 2013 9:51 PM Title: Ethan
Competely hooked! great story I love the way you develop your characters and the smooth flow of the story. keep up the great work!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the comment. Glad you are enjoying it. I just added a new chapter and will be adding more soon.
[Report This]Date: May 20 2013 4:24 PM Title: Day 4 Continued
I just read all nine chapters in one sitting...and this was the best of them all!
Minnie would appear to have committed the perfect crime. I mean; Marta and the title character have been keeping Our Hero secret from her. So, when Marta comes home and can't find the little guy, how are they going to broach the subject? Short of wrestling her to the ground and strip-searching her, that is.
No way that I can see! ;-)
Author's Response:
First off, I'm glad to see you are enjoying the story. That makes me happy.
And though it may seem like the perfect crime, remember, Lori has cameras all over the house. Marta doesn't know about any of it but Lori will find out. It's just a matter of whether it will be too late.
Glad you are enjoying it and please feel free to leave more comments
Date: May 19 2013 12:37 PM Title: Day 4
amazing story so far
Author's Response:
Thanks for the comment. Hope you continue reading and enjoy
[Report This]Date: May 15 2013 7:37 PM Title: Day 3 Concluded
No. No. You've got it wrong.
It should more about sex! The character development is fine as it is. ; )
Great story. Many good original ideas.
Please continue - the messier and more sinister, the better.
Author's Response:
Haha, well as you are seeing, I wasn't able to stay away from the sex stuff. The next chapter will be primarily about this new woman and Ethan. Who's to say how it will go.
Thanks for the compliment and comment. Hope you keep reading
[Report This]Date: May 15 2013 9:36 AM Title: Ethan
The story is pretty good, I think you should not worry about publishing it daily , it would stop your motivation and inspiration , I hope to see more :)
Author's Response:
Thanks, I don't really worry about it, it's just that as I make the outline and get further ahead, I want to make sure I keep up the writing. It actually helps me to think of more stuff for future chapters. And truth be told, it's comments like yours that keep me motivated and inspired.
Thanks for reading
[Report This]Date: May 13 2013 10:55 PM Title: Day 3 Concluded
Great story. I loved the story Lori told. And love how after all that he still wanted Marta's gorgeous feet. Can't wait till next chapter.
aaron
Author's Response:
Glad to hear you're enjoying it. I'm sorry to say it will be a day or two until I can get the next chapter up. But the good news is that I will be able to do 2 so that people will have a little more to read. Thanks for reading
Date: May 13 2013 9:35 PM Title: Day 3 Concluded
Okay things feel like they are going to get complicated. Lori might not mind now, but what happens when Martha doesn't want to give him up?
Author's Response:
Yea, that's kind of the point. I want this to be something that is forced to be dealt with.
[Report This]Date: May 13 2013 2:52 AM Title: Day 2 Concluded
Looks like Lori is the grand master mind behind everything. I wouldn't be surprised if she brought Martha along from the start to help her manage the care and secrecy of her new tiny. And I'm okay with that.
And hopefully Ethan doesn't go stir-crazy being cooped up in his room all day. Even if he decides he wants this, it's still a whole lot to take in all of the sudden.
Author's Response:
Lori definitely seems to be running the show.
Ethan won't be able to go stir crazy with these two crazy women grasping for his attention.
Thanks for reading and hope your enjoying it so far.
[Report This]Date: May 12 2013 2:08 PM Title: Day 2 Concluded
awww fuck I knew I shouldn't have read this story till it had more chs. Now im hooked and I have to wait. Ive stayed away but gave in.
If I could ask for anything its that he ask why hes shrieking. I would not be shushed by anyone if I was shrieking lol. He should be like WTF! is going on!
Great story add more TODAY!! I need it
Author's Response: Well I'm glad I have another fan. Sorry to get you so worked up over the anticipation of the next chapter. But I am sorry to say things will be slowing down. I will definitely get to that, but at the moment he hasn't really had time to grasp it or ask Lori what might be going on. At the moment, it doesn't look like Marta knows what is going on but plans on reaping the benefits of his shrinking. More answers will be coming in the next chapter which will be up tomorrow.
[Report This]Date: May 11 2013 3:58 PM Title: Day 2 Concluded
Love the Marta character and her sexy feet. Can't wait to see what happens next with him steadily getting smaller. Very good story.
aaron
Author's Response:
Yea, I have always loved the idea of a giant hispanic woman. Thanks for the comment. I am really enjoying writing this story for my fans
Date: May 11 2013 3:37 PM Title: Ethan
I love :3 Continue this story ! =D
Author's Response:
Thanks. And don't worry, this story has a long way to go
[Report This]Date: May 10 2013 9:26 AM Title: Ethan
Soo goood :3
Author's Response:
Glad you like it. I aim to please
[Report This]Date: May 08 2013 10:56 PM Title: Day 1
Real good start on this. I like the set-up, Ethan's in quite a pinch, with his bosse's daughter...
The spacing needs to be doubled, more-so, when there is dialog, the seperation works better that way. It's hard to get used to, (I know, because I'm still improving alot on this style myself), but as I read the quality of your writing shows that you can do it....
Author's Response:
Glad you're enjoying it. I know about the writing. Haha. I Nearly everyone has said that is the biggest problem so far.
Thank you for the comment, hope you are enjoying the story, and I will be working on my writing style to make it more enjoyable for ya'll.
[Report This]Date: May 08 2013 11:35 AM Title: Ethan
great stuff, can't wait to read more =)
Author's Response:
Thanks, I'm glad you're enjoying it. I am really having a fun time writing this story and seeing where it takes me. Hope you keep reading and that chapter 3 really gets your attention.
[Report This]Date: May 07 2013 10:50 PM Title: Day 1
OK, this sounds interesting.
I like your writing style.
Looking forward to see where this leads.
Note: there's no need for any running comentary to the reader.
Simple descriptions of each chapter will suffice.
Author's Response:
I can't apologize for the commentary. I myself enjoy to see what the reader says when reading stories and enjoy getting a word in before and after the chapter. I'm glad you are at least intrigued but may I suggest if you don't want to read the commentary, simply don't. Thanks for reading and I hope you continue to do so.
[Report This]Date: May 07 2013 6:07 PM Title: Ethan
Really good for a first start! The only complaint I have is the dialogue mixed with the descriptions but this has been voice before so whatever.
Anyway, the story itself is really good and I'm enjoying it. Ethan better hurry and make it up to Lori BEFORE he shrinks or he's screwed. When she's a goddess, There's no escape for him. By the by, will she be gentle or cruel? I can't tell fro. The direction this is going, but I would assume gentle. But after that rejection, the cruelty idea seeps into my brain...
Author's Response:
Thanks for the comment. I understand the problem with the dialogue being mixed up with everything else and am currently trying to make sure my future chapters definitely have those two separate.
As for her being gentle or cruel, I think we will just have to wait and see. I can't give it away or it takes away...from the enjoyment of not knowing what will happen next. Hope chapter 3 takes you for a loop as I wanted to throw a kink into everyone's thought process of how this story might go. Nothing quite like a wild card