[Report This]Date: May 16 2013 11:28 AM Title: Chapter 10
Great chapter. I love Susanna's innocence as far as letting Vincent fully explore her body and his reciprocation of her wishes has made this story that much more lovable and even believable. Well done and I'm looking forward to what happens next.
aaron
Date: May 16 2013 5:34 AM Title: Chapter 10
Hmm, guess I was wrong with my faerie folk comment earlier. Interesting explanation for where Vincent comes from. Is the forest itself enchanted and/or sentient?
Nice job on the body exploration chapter. Wish it could have gone longer. Very interested to see where this goes and what potential sequels are in store.
Author's Response:
Is the forest enchanted? I just posted a new chapter that might shed some light on this...
Originally, the body exploration was a lot longer, but I found I was rehashing some of the same experiences Vincent had already (i.e. after Susanna fainted, while they were on the beach, etc.). Good stuff, but it was kind of redundant.
Date: May 15 2013 4:33 AM Title: Chapter 10
Well if the story's ending, could she find the urge to eat him?
Author's Response:
Without giving too much away, I'm already outlining a sequel. Could such a situation still occur? We'll see... ;)