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Reviewer: Uhpoop Signed [Report This]
Date: March 24 2014 8:34 PM Title: Chapter 2: The Dream

I heard there was gonna be sharing is it coming?

Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: April 13 2013 5:10 PM Title: Chapter 2: The Dream

Your still is getting interesting, although you seem to mention a few things before actually explaining them properly, like yurni (which I quickly foun out was money), Likenja, Zanespa and T.M.R.P. (which I believe was mentioned in the previous chapter. It might be an idea to have a prolouge to help set the scene. You've been focusing on Reggie but you haven't decribed the scenery that much.



Author's Response:

With the scenery, it's hard to describe because of the first person thing, but I'll try to explain as much as possible!

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