[Report This]Date: June 04 2013 1:02 AM Title: Chapter 9
Excellent! I'm a sucker for Virtual Realities and you've rolled it in fantastic here! I think it takes more imagination and organization to thoroughly create an engaging alternate reality, and this is thoroughly engaging.
The main character is unique, Gage is an unusually strong willed and witty individual in spite of his predicament, he's one of my favorite male characters that I've seen since Chijinda in the Shrink High RPG.
So far Charis and Rima seem less dynamic than Gage, but I think that's more due to their limited character interaction, since Gage is the one the story follows. Though their interactions with Gage have still made them very entertaining characters. :]
I don't think I've ever read 14,000 words this fast, it makes me wish I'd slowed down even. This is very well written and I'll very much be looking forward to future chapters!
Author's Response:
Thanks very much for the kind review. The fact that Charis and Rima have been a bit flat has been bothering me too, so I hope to address that in upcoming chapters. Anyway, check back every Monday for the next riveting installment!