Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: December 10 2010 10:07 AM Title: Chapter 1

Well it was ok. I think it would be better if you split it up into chapters though. If a chapter is too long I tend to get put off because I can't know when to stop. Whereas if the stoy has seperate chapters I know I can come back to it later and know where I left off without much trouble.

Plus, if someone favoruated it they should get updates upon new chapters and if everything is in oen they can't . Not to mention it doesn't get updated to the recent submissions list so you get less views.