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Reviewer: Maximus Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 04 2013 11:29 PM Title: Ch.7 'Sarah' cont.'

Loved the foot scene! Love how a simple act of just placing her foot onto him can totally domiante and smother him. Great mouth scene too, wish she did eat him! lol, of course the story would be over then and that would be bad.

Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: February 04 2013 8:39 AM Title: Ch.7 'Sarah' cont.'

Here:

"Tommy, please dear, don't be mad at me...." "I didn't mean to hurt you, please, forgive me!"

I don't think ther is a need for the speech marks between the setences.

And here:

Her emence breath

You mean immense.

She doens't want him to be mad and yet she does the thing with whipped cream. Seems rather odd.

Reviewer: Dudemanguy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 03 2013 9:43 PM Title: Ch.7 'Sarah' cont.'

Oh Tom, why do you always trust the woman? They always turn on you, sooner or later. Just give it some time... it'll come sooner or later. Then Sara's just another one of 'them'. All in good time...

Another excellent chapter.

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