[Report This]Date: March 18 2013 9:22 PM Title: Differences in Love?
Your dialogue problems have gone away by around this chapter and I don't see any visible flaws in your writing.
I love how innocent his girlfriend is and how realistic the characters are rendered. Just in case I went back and checked my psychology textbook and sure enough their reactions fit well with typical human reactions so job extremely well done
Btw its funny how gentle your Angela is compared to mine
Author's Response:
Of course you haven't read the next chapter, then your view of Angela will flip upside down.
[Report This]Date: January 05 2013 10:23 PM Title: Differences in Love?
Excellent chapter. Loved how Tanya reacted to Andrew. Did I understand right? Is Tanya really breaking up with him?
An now what will Angela have in store for him in her room? But whatever it is I can't wait to see what happens next.
aaron
PS glad you were able to post this chapter early.
Author's Response:
Umm, no they're not breaking up. It's kind of complex right now but I'll clear it up in later chapters.
And I can guarantee you are going to enjoy chapter 5.