Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: November 28 2012 4:45 AM Title: 2: Framed

Second person is hard to pull off effectively. It's a nice touch, and different but I feel there is too much "you". You can still tell us details without saying you all the time. I think "you" should mainly used in relation to speech and actions and any extra details don't necessarily need "you" in the sentence. It's a thought. I've never really had any experience of second person.