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Reviewer: youre_my_slave Signed [Report This]
Date: June 27 2014 3:40 PM Title: Prologue

Please don't leave us hanging bro.

Reviewer: Jacksmith Signed [Report This]
Date: June 23 2013 1:03 PM Title: Chapter 7

Per request, here I am again.  I like most of what I see.  It ought to be noted that I normally will lean a little more toward stories with heavier action, but I am able to recognize a story done well even if it's not the genre I go for first.  Note that I'm in no way suggesting you add more action all of a sudden, because I don't think it would fit your world too well.  I myself have tried this type of story a couple times and know it can be tough, so kudos.

I have to give you props for your maintenance of a formal speech style in your characters.  Normally, if a writer starts up in a style like that, they will at some point drop the ball and it can be much more jarring than if they hadn't done it at all.  However, you've managed to keep it up.  It won't be for everyone, but I think it fits your story well and gives the world authenticity.  You have a nice variety of vocabulary and sentence structures that keeps anything from feeling stale.  Additionally, you have some nice restraint in your fetish content; it feels much more like a story than some of the more pornographic works around.  Both have their audiences, of course, but for a fantasy story such as this, going for understatement and subtetly like you have will get you more mileage.

I'll admit the alternating (sort of) between Nami's present with the giantess, as well as flashbacks to her development, can feel a little choppy.  I'm not saying don't do it, it just might be good to make clearer distinctions, or have longer segments of one or the other before switching back.

Just my two cents.  Keep it up!

Reviewer: youre_my_slave Signed [Report This]
Date: June 21 2013 10:51 PM Title: Chapter 14

My face while I read this: http://www.myfacewhen.net/view/300-rainbow-puke

Reviewer: youre_my_slave Signed [Report This]
Date: June 21 2013 1:11 AM Title: Chapter 14

Sitting here, eagerly awaiting second installment at 3 in the morning.

Reviewer: youre_my_slave Signed [Report This]
Date: June 18 2013 5:20 PM Title: Chapter 13

Personally, after catching them I would've put them on the floor and stomped them to death or let my cat eat them. But if she had done that instead, there very well wouldn't be a story, would there?

Author's Response:

Most likely no!  But im not doing my job right!   I hope that your starting to fall in love with the characters and DONT want to see that happen to them.  We will work on that.

Reviewer: youre_my_slave Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 18 2013 10:53 AM Title: Chapter 13

Well, when I read the first paragraph I almost had a heart attack because the first thing I thought was "Oh god, Xi is going to be eaten by a spider." But then she wasn't so...there's that.

Author's Response:

I need to stay consistent with what I have already written.  In the beginning I mentioned that Xi and Nami had been trapped together for a while, the topic of which will be explored in great detail here coming up.

Reviewer: youre_my_slave Signed [Report This]
Date: June 14 2013 7:49 AM Title: Chapter 12

I woke up. I saw this. I celebrated.

Author's Response:

:D

Reviewer: youre_my_slave Signed [Report This]
Date: June 11 2013 8:44 PM Title: Chapter 10

Okay, after reading this story for like the tenth time, when Tracy throws Nami in the glass, sprays her with ice cold water, and leaves her alone in the dark to wash up, I was really hoping that was a case of "didn't know her own strength", but it was completely deliberate MALICE. Please, PLEASE tell me this girl has a reason for treating them this way other than "she felt like it", PLEASE!

Author's Response:

Lol i'm glad you like the story so much.  Believe me I have some great twists planned for this story and in the end most of your questions should be answered.  As for the particulars about their physical features, well, part of the fun in reading fantasy is coming to those kinds of conclusions yourself.  Please, im not trying to make excuses, but I will update this as soon as I have my laptop back.  The flashdrive I have the story and my notes saved on is not compatible with this computer, so I cannot update again until I have my laptop. Thanks again for your interest.

Reviewer: youre_my_slave Signed [Report This]
Date: June 11 2013 8:26 PM Title: Prologue

These are a few weird questions that have been bugging me for the entirety of your absence, so if you've got an answer, that'd be great. Do the Calculi not bear children because of population control? (Having children=more mouths to feed) plus they're all on the verge of starvation anyways so is it just to make sure everyone starves less? Because they seem to be a sort of human-insect hybrid, these are the awkward questions that have been plaguing me: Do the Calculi women possess breasts? Also, though rare, do they birth live spawn, like humans, or eggs, like insects? Please satisfy my curiosity!

Reviewer: youre_my_slave Signed [Report This]
Date: June 11 2013 8:19 PM Title: Prologue

Does a Calculus' antennae serve a function like it does for true insects as a sort of communicator or is it purely vestigial and just to add to their insect-like appearance?

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Date: June 11 2013 8:15 PM Title: Prologue

I would find it funny if at some point in this trilogy Nami actually manages to make it back to Sanctuary but when she's halfway through the door and relived to be home, Tracy drags her out by her legs kicking, screaming in terror, and desperately clawing at the ground for help.

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Date: June 10 2013 6:48 PM Title: Chapter 11

I hope I'm not bothering you with all these comments, but you are just SUCH a great writer leaving all of these unsolved questions in my head like, "how did she get there in the first place?" "Why does the giantess hate her so much?" "What purpose has she been kept around for? Why not just kill her and be done with it?" "How did Xi get wrapped up in this mess?" "Has her colony attempted a rescue or did they just leave her for dead?" Those are just a few. There are SO many more, I'm not even kidding. Hopefully, someday they'll be answered. Your ability to give so much information but to strategically leave out critical parts to be explained later (I hope) ignites a hunger for knowledge in me, in all of your readers where we will remain unsatisfied until we know why something happened or what caused it. For that, I applaud you. *theatre wide standing ovation*

Author's Response:

Believe me its no bother whatsoever.  I really encourage people to leave comments.  Again, I apologize for the incrediblely long delay in finishing this story, but obstacle after obstacle keeps preventing me from finishing it.  Now my laptop is in for repairs and I wont be getting it back for a while.  Anyway more to come soon, and as I progress through the trilogy, all questions will (hopefully) be answered.

Reviewer: youre_my_slave Signed [Report This]
Date: June 10 2013 2:17 PM Title: Prologue

Is this going to turn into a "giantess communicates through dreams" deal? SHPOOKY.

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Date: April 14 2013 6:03 PM Title: Chapter 6

Why does Tracy hate Nami so much?

Author's Response:

You'll just have to find out.  In any case sorry for the overly long break I took from this story.  Since my last chapter submission I have graduated from college and moved from Pennsylvania to Hawaii, so I've been kind of busy!  But im currently looking for work and with very little in the way of daytime responsibility, so I will be finishing this and adding new stories in the days to come.  Give me a couple more days, I want to re read this so that I can add new chapters that make sense.  I had a direction I was going with Nami and everybody else, but I've forgotten many key points that I need to refresh myself with.  I promise you all, more chapters are coming soon.

Reviewer: Shrunken Guy Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 04 2013 7:16 PM Title: Chapter 3

Very dramatic

Reviewer: youre_my_slave Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 14 2012 5:20 PM Title: Prologue

If you update in the next 7-11 days, it'll be a great Christmas present!

Reviewer: youre_my_slave Signed [Report This]
Date: October 31 2012 8:15 PM Title: Chapter 11

Update soon, I miss you! Pretty please? *puppy dog eyes*

Author's Response:

Give me another week and i'll put up another chapter.  I've been slammed lately with a bunch of research papers but i'll add another soon, promise =)

 

Reviewer: youre_my_slave Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 16 2012 2:53 PM Title: Chapter 11

So...Are we going to know how that hole came to be? Also, " Some metal bars rested against one another in a staircase-like configuration which were held together by a smaller metal hoop." was kind of tough. I'm thinking keys. Am I close?

Author's Response:

Lol of course, it wouldn't make much sense for me to leave a cliffhanger like that without explaining it!  To answer a question from earlier this year, Leigh's hair was braided and brown.  I will do my best to keep up on this story for you, your_my_slave, because you keep me motivated with your constant interest!

Reviewer: youre_my_slave Signed [Report This]
Date: September 20 2012 4:23 PM Title: Prologue

I have reason to believe that you are dead.

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Date: August 21 2012 11:53 AM Title: Chapter 9

What color is (was) Leigh's hair? (just curious).

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