Date: September 25 2012 11:21 PM Title: Chapter 7
This is my favorite chapter of the story, I love seeing the changes from how the ladies are from their real world counterparts. I hope this continues soon! Keep going, you are doing great!
[Report This]Date: June 26 2012 6:01 PM Title: Chapter 7
I can't get enough of your stories dude, they're AMAZING!! Keep up the good work! When I read your stories, it's like reading abook, like I get fully absorbed in it and visualize myself in the world which wouldn't be possible if you didn't have a great writing style. You have great pace by not having too much or too little in a chapter, a good vocabulary with a word or two that I haven't heard of before which is a good sign of an intelligent vocabulary, abd I love the narrative and how it's different than your other stories while still being similiar enough to captivate my attention! Great Job! My only critiscism is that in the first few chapters some of the descriptions used repeated adjectives that you had previously used in preceeding chapters and by all means that is not a major problem, if a problem at all, just a little something that I noticed.
Author's Response:
Hey thank you for the in depth review, and I'm super glad you're enjoying the story. I'll try to police the "repeat adjectives" as more chapters come out :)
Date: June 22 2012 3:31 PM Title: Chapter 7
Will there be any of his male friends from his reality? I saw you included another female from his former world, but I'm curious to see if there is anyone who shares his plight.
Author's Response:
Probably not. A key aspect of the psuedo reality is that the male population is dramatically reduced, so it changes a lot of things (ex. Ms. Bianchi isn't married anymore, as there aren't enough men to go around). This concept will be expanded upon as more chapters come out.
[Report This]Date: June 20 2012 1:40 AM Title: Chapter 7
Looking VERY forward to the next chapter
[Report This]Date: June 19 2012 8:25 PM Title: Chapter 7
wow i love the world you created
[Report This]Date: June 19 2012 8:07 PM Title: Chapter 7
Awesome chapter. Kinda a bummer that dean didn't get to ms. Bianchi's house though. But really glad his sister saved him from that bitch(eventhough she just shrugged it off). Wonder how he will repay her generosity?(hope it involves her feet/toes) an can't wait to see his mom again. All in all I'm really enjoying this superb story.
aaron
[Report This]Date: June 19 2012 7:14 PM Title: Chapter 7
Wow, every chapter gets better. You write these stories so well, and this one seems like it's gonna be great both plot wise and sex wise. I honestly can't wait for the next chapter!