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Reviewer: Small_but_firm Signed [Report This]
Date: January 17 2012 2:51 PM Title: After Jane woke up...

This is good, but it needs more. You should expand on this, and maybe have the girls get a bit dirty, if you know what I mean.

Reviewer: lilguyunderfoot Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 16 2012 5:52 PM Title: Just Shrunk!

not bad, fun stuff, but i agree with the last reviewer. also try to work on your dialogue a bit it sounds somewhat inhuman sometimes :P keep it up, i like this

Reviewer: littlemac Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 16 2012 9:41 AM Title: Just Shrunk!

Hey great start! I like just how spoiled the female characters sound. My suggestion would be to work at fleshing the characters out just a bit more. Adding some more background description would help- really take the time to "set the scene". Other than that, I think this story has a lot of potential, and I look forward to any updates!

Reviewer: TINYDON Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 16 2012 6:58 AM Title: Just Shrunk!

Good stuff.... More!



Author's Response:

Thanks....Sure!

Reviewer: Cheezo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 15 2012 10:52 AM Title: Just Shrunk!

Great start! Look forward to the coming chapters.

Author's Response:

Thanks!! :)

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