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Reviewer: Afroking Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 26 2012 12:58 AM Title: Prologue

its crazy i feal the same thing coming from the characters

Reviewer: angeloflife Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 25 2012 9:48 PM Title: Chapter 9

Sylvie really is a sick person, she is more easy to dislike than to like. I can't believe how she acts and treats people by picking them up, playing around to crush them and orders the people of the village to give her food, thats just horrible. It's even worst by the fact she is a princess that makes her feel she has even more power over people on top of her giant size.

I see her never becoming a good person to anyone that is smaller than her and even more so becoming a good person to her older brother. I feel so bad for Valdan how his life has been, he never seems to be happy around his family and they don't see this, only a few people do see it that are not family.

I like their sister Belena she is a sweet and good person with a hint of shyness to her. I like how she acts around that one boy that likes her.

Valdan i just feel bad for, the poor guy has never gets a break from his family and from Sylvie.

 

I look forward to each new chapter, you have been doing a good job on wrighting the story. I enjoy reading it.



Author's Response:

Thank you very much for the review, though you're wrong about Sylvie - she will change, and soon.

Reviewer: Afroking Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 25 2012 3:06 PM Title: Chapter 9

 

love the addition. u really got to feel bad for Valdan though, he never really gets what he wants.



Author's Response:

He'll have his happy end, but he's got to suffer a bit more, unfortunately ;-)

Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: July 17 2012 2:21 PM Title: Chapter 5

I can't believe they're already thinking about marrying the princess. I'm glad she doesn't want to marry him because it does seem rather rushed (premtive).

Reviewer: prophetofgreed Signed [Report This]
Date: July 08 2012 5:01 PM Title: Chapter 4

After reading chapter 8, I looked this over again to see Lorek's character again. 

I can see how Lorek may interest Belena now (parental issues/lack of parents hint), or his little show of bravery (how he actually spoke to her) and now his apparent interest in seeing her again by sneaking through the giant castle. 

Though I'm curious in how your going to make Lorek that dream man Belena's always dreamed of.

But, nevertheless, I will wait patiently for your next chapter showcasing how Vandan and Slyvie can possibly reunite. Or grow as characters.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading, I hope the next chapter will live up to expectations! I'll try and write more about Lorek's character, he definitely needs to be more than just the required love interest.

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 07 2012 10:32 PM Title: Chapter 8

Loved the foot rubbing by that douche-bag. Glad he got a little taste of what he deserves. Glad you made this chapter bout Belenda also glad that Lorek is back. Can't wait to read what happens next.

aaron
Ps when I said I was glad this chapter was about Belenda I meant I liked seeing a chapter a with valdan an Sylvie then the one with Belenda. Was glad you didn't cram them together in one chapter, cause I rather enjoyed only focusing on one or the other.
Btw awesome job with the story telling with this one.

Author's Response:

Thanks! Glad you like both the storylines, and yeah, cramming them together would be a mistake, since they really have nothing to do with each other.

Reviewer: Afroking Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 05 2012 9:00 PM Title: Chapter 8

 

awwww good chapter i need more lol. Great work on the story.



Author's Response:

There'll be lots more, don't worry about that!

Reviewer: Pixis Signed [Report This]
Date: July 05 2012 8:48 PM Title: Chapter 8

Good chapter. I was wondering when Lorek and Belena would be reunited. I must admit, from the start Belena reminded me of Merida from Pixar's "Brave" and the suitor business reenforces that. But I suppose it's a challenge one would expect a giant princess to face.

I only wish the scene of her toying with Argo had been a bit longer. *evil smile*



Author's Response:

I'm still deciding if Argo should return, but he probably will. I haven't seen Brave yet, I'll have to wait till August to see it here. :-S

Reviewer: prophetofgreed Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 28 2012 7:39 PM Title: Chapter 7

Great chapter. Fantastic job showing the vain attitude of Sylvie with Valdan. As well as Valdan's pursuit of independence and becoming his own person. Hopefully with Valdan missing Sylvie will finally realize her lack of empathy and realize how she's humilated Valdan through her childhood.

Can't wait for your next chapter with these two characters. Though I'm sure you'll have Belena become a great character as well.  



Author's Response:

I'll tell the two stories in alternating chapters. And yes, Sylvie will come to a turning point very soon.

Reviewer: Pixis Signed [Report This]
Date: June 27 2012 11:45 PM Title: Chapter 7

Great chapter. I loved the snow-troll and the details about the mountain-tribes. Very cool to learn more about this fantasy world of yours. I hope Valdan and Sylvie are reunited. Her teasing and toying with him is always amusing.



Author's Response:

They won't be separarted for long. She'll manage to find him soon enough. I won't go too much into world-building, but I felt a few extra fantasy details were necessary.

Reviewer: LJin Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 27 2012 10:04 AM Title: Chapter 7

Hah I can see how Sylvie is so overprotective of his brother as much as she likes to tease and annoy him. :) Valdan desires 'freedom' from his family and adventures, but I found cute that everytime that danger approached him he got truly scared and sought the protection of his sister and the first thing that came on his mind also was her. Valdan and Sylvie need to learn how certain words and actions can hurt the feelings of each other.Both want to be respected, and I know that they love each other while not demonstrating that, but they still are treating each other in the wrong way... there is a long way to go.

I think this last event, despite being sad, will be good for both of them to improve and learn some things about themselves. :)



Author's Response:

You're absolutely right, lol! They both need to change their opinions of each other, but, like you said, it'll definitely take time and effort.

Reviewer: angeloflife Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 27 2012 8:24 AM Title: Chapter 7

You know what sucks is that everytime that i read this good story, i end up disliking Sylvie even more. She does not treat her brother well and seems to make fun of his small size. Their mother and farther are blind to this as they just see it as normal playing.

Sylvie is not a good princess and is the last person in the story that should have the size of a giant as she sees normal people as play things most of the time it seems. If this was more like real life all three of their kids would have been born giant size in steed of Valdan getting the shit end of the stick so to speak.

Am happy to see he had the balls to leave Sylvie sure it hasen't started well for him by falling into the icy river and going over the waterfall but this will be a good thing for him as it got him away from his no good sister.

Dammit he is half giant also he has to get something from his mother's side, his sisters got their mother's giant size but he had to get something also from her if it was not her size.

Am just feeling really bad for Valdan for how his life is going, to be born from a giant mother and to be born human size when his sisters get all the size and for him to be treadted poorly by his youngest sister just because he was born small, it just brings back somethings from my pass that has me feeling bad for him from when i was being pick on in school.

Am looking forward to what happens now that he left his sister and is now found by these two boys that are taken him back to their village. Good work.



Author's Response:

Well, he is a bit tougher than average, otherwise he wouldn't have survived that waterfall, and there will be a situation later on where his giant parentage helps him survive an impossible situation. But his main strength is that he never gives up fighting, even if there's a chance he could lose. I was also picked on constantly while in school, so I can relate! ;-)

I did want Sylvie to start out as a complete brat, so that it would take something drastic to change her and force her to grow up. It's ok if you dislike her (you're supposed to, I guess), but hopefully by the end of the story you'll come to change your opinion, as she will definitely have changed by then. Her parents aren't unaware of what she is doing, but they are finding it difficult to force her to behave, so to speak.

The only reason the girls are giants and Valdan isn't is because I find the concept of giant women attractive and fascinating - giant men not so much. Not much of a reason, but yeah... :-)

Thanks for the great review!

Reviewer: Pixis Signed [Report This]
Date: June 16 2012 1:40 PM Title: Chapter 6

Prince Argo certainly wasn't what I was expecting. I can't wait to see what sort of lessons Belena teaches him. Seeing the arrogant prince humbled by a young giantess ought to be rather amusing.



Author's Response:

I tried to make his behaviour unexpected - I guess in real life not everyone would immediately fall in love with a giantess like I would!

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 15 2012 5:52 PM Title: Chapter 6

This story is just wonderful an I'm so glad your posting more chapters. Can't wait to see what happens on the 'camping trip'. Also glad Belena isn't gonna marry this douche-bag prince.

aaron

Author's Response:

Thanks! Yes, she is definitely not going to marry him.

Reviewer: LJin Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 15 2012 9:29 AM Title: Chapter 6

Gosh, what a jerk! Hope she teaches him a good lesson.

I feel so sad because of Belena, hope she finds the prince of her stories, even if he isn't an real prince.

 

And I'm very very anxious to see how the 'adventure' of Sylvie and Valdan is going. Hah They are so cute together.



Author's Response:

Thanks! They'll be in the next chapter.

Reviewer: supernatural Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 10 2012 8:28 PM Title: Chapter 5

i really hopoe you keep writing because so far what i've seen is people on here with very little creativity, your stories are more fun i think.

Reviewer: Pixis Signed [Report This]
Date: June 04 2012 2:29 AM Title: Chapter 5

A suitor for Belena, eh? Interesting. I love the playfully antagonistic interactions of Sylvie and Valdan. That will provide plenty of comedy in chapters to come, I'm sure.



Author's Response:

"Playfully antagaonistic" seems to be the key concept here, lol! Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: jacksmith5996 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 01 2012 6:28 PM Title: Prologue

Very much enjoying this. I especially like the playfully antagonistic relationship between Valdan and Sylvie, it's fun and domineering without resorting to overt sadistic themes; it allows the story to stay with the "gentle" theme while still exploring other types of relationships. Quite good, keep it up.



Author's Response:

Thank you very much, glad you are enjoying it.

Reviewer: angeloflife Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 01 2012 10:56 AM Title: Chapter 5

I hope something happens to Sylvie on the journey to make her stop being such a horrible person to her brother. Arily is right to what Valdan was saying she is bad at being a princess and would not make a very good queen.

I hope to see them run into a mage that some how switches their size for a bit or forever.

Am enjoying the story but so far i am not liking Sylvie and feeling bad for Valdan.



Author's Response:

Ha, that would be the ultimate in just deserts! But don't worry, Sylvie will turn out all right eventually, but there's still a long way to go.

Reviewer: Afroking Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 01 2012 10:11 AM Title: Chapter 5

 

wow glad to see the story back, I cant wait till they st off on their journey.



Author's Response:

Thanks, I'll try and write the next chapter quicker than the previous few.

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