[Report This]Date: August 19 2012 1:20 AM Title: Making History
While I'm sure you just want to get through the story as soon as possible, to be honest, I thought there was still more you could've written, this chapter seems rather rushed, and the character development that we'd seen from both Nicole, and Jenna, suddenly made a complete 180. I would've liked to have seen more of Jenna trying to keep her husband and step-son as normal in her eyes as possible, but of course she would have inevitably fallen in with the rest of the world, but over all it's been a good story, and I hope you continue to write more.
Author's Response:
I can understand that the character development feels rushed, but it's supposed to. This was, like, the third or fourth chapter I wrote of this story because I always write an ending when I start a story so I know where it's going. It was always supposed to feel like a 180 because Jenna reached a breaking point. So the arguement isn't whether this chapter seemed rushed, the arguement should be if I did a good or bad job about leading you to a breaking point. It was always supposed to be about Jenna being so miserable and not being able to accept society's views on how to treat tiny men until the laws views refelected society's. Jenna breaks down and nicole takes this vulnerable moment for Jenna to reflects on how miserable her life was. Then I also had her little "hiccup" chapter where it shows her longing to be like the rest of the society, but can't. I put in a lot of things to try and lead you to that moment where her anger finally manifests by shoving her husband between her cheeks because now she has no rules to hold her back. I hope you go back and reread the entire story, because maybe your view will change next time you get to that chapter, or maybe I really didn't do a good job to get you to the breaking point.
Anyone else feel like tinyman91, or were the people out there who thought I did a good/decent job leading up to Jenna's breaking point?
[Report This]Date: August 17 2012 9:18 PM Title: Making History
Love this story! Sad to see it end next chapter :(
[Report This]Date: August 17 2012 5:12 PM Title: Making History
Oh hell yes, been waiting for this chapter to come out, and you have not dissapointed one bit. As sad as it will be for the story to end, I still look forward to the finale. Good job, and thanks for the story.