Reviewer: DrCreep Signed [Report This]
Date: January 07 2012 6:51 AM Title: Amongst Friends

You said this:

Don't worry, I don't think I have any TOO unbelieveable situations coming up, but then again, a disease that shrinks the entire male species is pretty outlandish, and I doubt most guys would typically get caught in situations that these tiny men are going to be getting in. I try to make my stories seem as real as possible which is why I put so much description into them and give characters reasoning for their choices, but no one has any idea what the limits of a shrunken man truly would be, so it's hard to say what's realistic and what's not. I actually just read a scientific article talking about this matter, and it had some interesting theories, like a man falling from a table would be perfectly fine because even though he seems like's miles high, he's only a few feet off the ground. My guess is what worried you was the whole "dad being in a shoe all day" thing, am I right? I can already tell you I've outlined 12 chapters and none have to do with tiny guys being stepped on all day, which in all fairness, would likely kill them. Do you have any other unrealistic concerns though?

 

The problem with your line of thought is this:

If you follow the lead of your article and make these guys virtually indestructible then yes you will lose the plausibility factor.  Which should never be lost even in lieu of the circumstances that brought this major event about.

The best stories get away from what caused the shrinking as quickly as possible so that realism can enter back into the frey.

Following your present line of reasoning, you might want to go on and make them able to breath under water, or sit in a fire all night long. Or have the power to fly. There'd be no real difference and your story would quickly become boring.

Also, there is nothing wrong with fatalities occuring.  This makes your shrunken characters flesh and bones again.. Not miniature Supermen who'd be better off in a super hero comic.

These are serious things to consider.

So yes, I do have concerns that you are about to destroy your story in unrealism.  Never forget, that the realistic stories are always the best ones because they quickly bury the shrinking process and refocus the reader on the hardships that such scenarios woud incur.  If you bog yourself down on scientific theories you will doom this story on abstractions that need not interfere.

Author's Response:

Well, there's no crushing, throwing little men in fire, or breathing underwater. There's only one part in the story from hear on out you might have a problem with, and it's in the very last chapter, but even that is something I think you should be fine with because I don't describe it as it's happening, just that it is GOING to happen. 

Oh, and I hate fatalities. I think they're morbid and it makes me feel like the writer has a death wish. I only do it if I think it's a good way to end a story, like in my story Tutoring, and there I didn't even describe the death. I also hate fatalities because a core of my stories is the relationship between the shrunken man and the giantess, not the multiple shrunken men she murders that don't have nearly as fleshed out relationships with the girl. 

As for the arguement of realism being a core concept of a good story, that's strictly opinion. I know what you're talking about by making them superheo like. I personally can't stand stories where the shrunken character becomes flattened and reinflates, but that's that writer's fantasy, to be crushed over and over, but not be killed. To me that's too unbelievable, but it's mainly because they add a superhero component to it. Stories that talk about being sat on, but not actually flattening, yet still feeling pain I can buy. Most likely the tiny guy would die, but as long as they don't make it seem crazy, I'm okay with it. But again, crushing isn't my thing. I think it's neccessary to look past realism, not completely, but enough to give it wiggle room and enjoy the fetish more. For example, if we didn't write anything that wasn't realistic, we couldn't have any insertion in stories, which is a pretty popular action in stories. Though it's likely impossible to breathe when you're shoved face-first up a vagina, I don't mind ignoring that little fact to enjoy the story more, because if you only go for realism, all your left with is worshipping giant body parts or dying.

Reviewer: aaron Signed [Report This]
Date: January 04 2012 7:57 AM Title: Amongst Friends

the dialog in this chapter was very good. an the situations that the girls were in were pretty cool.

aaron