[Report This]Date: January 10 2012 11:56 PM Title: The New Law
I love this story and am engaged in the plot. As a fan of female feet, I appreciated the casual references to feet some of the characters threw out. I also like your penchant for being descriptive. I find scenes in which a tiny person is forced to smell a woman's feet, especially someone that they're close to, is deeply degrading. I don't know if you are a fan of eventually having main characters (tiny ones) be done away with at the feet (insert body part of your choice), but I hope the stepbrother is eventually done away with in something foot related, but unique. I'm a broken record but have often thought about the realism behind a tiny person being kept scrunched under a girl's toes or inside her sock until they suffer brain damage or something. That's probably too dark, but I'm a sick person! Please post your preexisting chapters asap! Thanks for a great story so far.
[Report This]Date: January 09 2012 4:24 PM Title: The New Law
Don't let that guy throw off from writing this. Characters need to remain fresh, so it's important to keep writing as often as possible. Part of that derives from me being a fan of the story and eager to read more, but I also consider it sound advice.
This is one of only a few stories I refresh the 'most recent' tab for every day. As for realism? Currently, shrinking human beings is sheer fantasy. Since this is an epidemic that can't be explained, you get to set the rules of the situation. If you want to say that their molecules are closer together and it somehow makes them less vulnerable, then that's how it is. You don't owe anyone an explanation either. I have yet to question the 'realism' of this story. I just clicked on reviews to show support.
Awesome read so far. Please continue. :)
Author's Response:
Don't worry, no one can ever really throw me off from writing a story. Usually by the time I start posting it, I already have several chapters completed and an outline for the end of the story. So, it's pretty much impossible to throw me off, or for people to get me to write the story a certain way, because by the time the first chapter is posted it's already too late. The story is too near completion to take in the thoughts of others. I just like to argue against them, or warn them of what's to come. If they don't like it, they can read something else. After all, I write GTS fiction mainly for myself. If other people enjoy it, I'm excited to hear it, but if they don't, then that means I just don't write in the style they like, which is okay too. After all, I am writing for free over here, so I don't need to keep my audience in mind like a professional writer.
I do enjoy people's critiques though, and if I agree with something or want to try a suggestion they make, I may include it for a later story. So I hope everyone doesn't feel discouraged to make critiques just because they likely can't affect the story I'm currently writing, because your words may inspire a future work of mine.
[Report This]Date: January 04 2012 2:04 AM Title: The New Law
I like this chapter a lot, with the different war stories being told.. My only caution is that you don't make this story go completely implausible by making the shrunken protaganists indestructible. If you can pull this story back away from this then it will be among the classics.
Just my opinion.
Author's Response:
Don't worry, I don't think I have any TOO unbelieveable situations coming up, but then again, a disease that shrinks the entire male species is pretty outlandish, and I doubt most guys would typically get caught in situations that these tiny men are going to be getting in. I try to make my stories seem as real as possible which is why I put so much description into them and give characters reasoning for their choices, but no one has any idea what the limits of a shrunken man truly would be, so it's hard to say what's realistic and what's not. I actually just read a scientific article talking about this matter, and it had some interesting theories, like a man falling from a table would be perfectly fine because even though he seems like's miles high, he's only a few feet off the ground. My guess is what worried you was the whole "dad being in a shoe all day" thing, am I right? I can already tell you I've outlined 12 chapters and none have to do with tiny guys being stepped on all day, which in all fairness, would likely kill them. Do you have any other unrealistic concerns though?
Oh, and here's the link to the article I read on the off chance you're interested in reading it http://fathom.lib.uchicago.edu/2/21701757/
[Report This]Date: December 20 2011 12:12 PM Title: The New Law
More, more, more, please!!!!!
I hope there's interaction between the daughter and both of the guys... And I hope the mother has to get involved too! Perhaps to play peacekeeper or something..
In any event, this is a great story so far.
[Report This]Date: December 19 2011 10:46 AM Title: The New Law
This is very nice... And I really like the stepfather/brother angle... I just can't wait to read more of what you come up with.
Great Job!!! Keep it up!!!
Date: December 17 2011 9:26 PM Title: The New Law
A great story maybe,go on...
[Report This]Date: December 17 2011 8:30 PM Title: The New Law
great start. hope to see more.
aaron
[Report This]Date: December 17 2011 7:08 PM Title: The New Law
What a great story this is going to be! I love the primise and the interplay between the characters already. I hope the male "relatives" learn about the power of female feet (amongst other body parts) as things get going. Keep up the good work. I see great things with this story!