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Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 04 2011 3:07 PM Title: An Unexpected Call

great story, nice job.
cant wait to see what you have next.

aaron

Reviewer: aaron Signed [Report This]
Date: October 02 2011 6:07 AM Title: Lenora's Rough Playtime

Great jOb.loved the fact the Jenna did in fact call the police. Made it a little dealer for me. An now I can't wait to see the next awesome chapter. Hopefully involving alot of jenna's feet/toes. But well see.

Aaron
Ps what is the new project about?

Author's Response: Well, I have a feeling that the next chapter's mostly going to be a plot chapter, but I'll see what I can do with feet. My next project…let's just say that I'm doing a collaboration.

Reviewer: F_G_F Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 30 2011 10:10 PM Title: A Leisurely Stroll

I really like where this story is heading from here.  Rival lesbian lovers?  Tiny girl?  What's not to like about this?  Good job bringing the confrontation out in such a way that I didn't see it coming until it actually happened.  I look forward to seeing what Leonora has in store for our dear friend Amanda!



Author's Response: Thanks for the praise! Lenora most definitely has a few things in mind for Amanda, although some of them may not be what you'd expect.

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 30 2011 6:36 PM Title: A Leisurely Stroll

cool chapter, i cant wait to see where you take this tale..
i just hope lenora has pretty feet, lol.

aaron

Author's Response: Feet will very probably play a part in this next section of the story, so no worries there.

Reviewer: jacksmith5996 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 17 2011 3:58 PM Title: Lenora

Thanks for the shout-out.  I like most of what you've got here.  Honestly, I'm not much of one for stories that leap directly for the throat on the sex scenes, which is certainly what you did, but you write them well enough that I didn't find myself minding it so much.  Your story/sex scene switch-off style among the chapters seems a bit risky, as this can potentially limit what you can pull off narratively, but I'll give you the benefit of the doubt and see where you can take it.  I like the awkwardness you seem to be generating between Lenora and your tiny protagonist, which I assume is going to have some kind of pay-off whenever the two of them end up in some steamy fetishistic scene.  Again, I urge you to not feel the need to pile on layer after liquid layer of lesbian sex; you can very easily create tantalizing scenarios without having these constantly.  Keep it up!



Author's Response: It's great to hear from an author I admire immensely. I was in fact planning to tone down the sex for the next few chapters, just to develop the characters more before the story's climax. I'm really glad you're enjoying it, since I was rather wary of how my first story would turn out. Again, thanks for the feedback.

Reviewer: ZeR0x Signed [Report This]
Date: September 14 2011 5:43 PM Title: At Jenna's Feet

Hooray! I like the way you wrote the foot fetish part :) Hopefully you plan on adding more!

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 14 2011 6:11 AM Title: At Jenna's Feet

love the story immensely. as well as the gentle playfulness of these two.. an i cant wait to see where you take this story.

aaron
ps will amanda an jenna be painting eachothers toes in a future chapter?

Author's Response: Hmm…toe painting wasn't exactly something I had considered, but I might think about it for later in the story, or maybe something else featuring the same characters.

Reviewer: kingsun Signed [Report This]
Date: September 12 2011 2:17 PM Title: Lenora

Hey it's me again.... great chapter once again! The idea of having plot development end sexual scenes following each other in chapters is brilliant! I wish it was the case in many boring stories i had to filter to get the good parts! Your plot though is still very enjoyable, i like the closeness and playfulness of the 2 friends! :) I hope this idea of alternating between plot development and more fetish-like chapters won't force you or make the flow of the story unnatural... You can handle it though, i am sure! Keep up the good work! :D



Author's Response: Thanks again! It's always nice to hear that you're doing something right.

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 11 2011 9:20 PM Title: Lenora's Intelligent Conversation

very good story. im interested.

aaron

Reviewer: Klyk Signed [Report This]
Date: September 11 2011 3:53 PM Title: Bedtime with Jenna

Great story.
I'm hoping for a part three.

Reviewer: kingsun Signed [Report This]
Date: September 11 2011 5:36 AM Title: Lenora

I kinda liked the "abrupt" as it was mentioned before, second chapter, cause, i am close to their age and i can relate myself to them...if your best friend admits he/she likes you, and you are lying on the bed, it would most probably develop as you did in that chapter.... i also liked the playfulness of the whole thing, and i suggest you keep it up in the next chapters.... Finally, i would like it if you included lots of feet-play too, not only dominant ( as i see it coming from the blonde) but maybe also playful from her friend :)

 

All in all, i enjoyed it a lot till now, and it's deffinitely one of the stories i am following.... Keep up the good work! :)



Author's Response: Thank you! And yes, feet is in the categories list, so I will be adding that in there at some point.

Reviewer: Pixis Signed [Report This]
Date: September 11 2011 2:53 AM Title: Bedtime with Jenna

I love the sub-genre of naturally tiny people in a normal-sized world so I am definitely intrigued. Having a female lead character makes this stand out from most other stories of this type.

I think you kind of rushed things on the second chapter though. Sure, we all want to see the ladies hook up but it was very abrupt. "You're gay too? OMG, come here so I can screw your brains out!" It seemed a little forced. Getting to know them as characters first would make it more meangingful when they get together.



Author's Response: I entirely agree with you. I did realize how gratuitous it was, but I guess it could be explained with the (admittedly extremely thin) framing device that Jenna had always secretly wanted to do this, and now is her chance. Don't worry, the rest of the story won't be entirely lesbian SW sex scenes. That chapter was mostly to test my skills at actually writing one. :D

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: September 10 2011 10:38 PM Title: Lenora

I just had to add my support to this story so hopefully it will grow as good SW stories seem to fall by the wayside here sometimes.

 

All the best and looking forward to more.



Author's Response: Thanks! I agree about the SW discrepancy on here, and that's part of the reason I wrote this. I tried to make it the story I always wished I could read, so I'm glad you're liking it as well.

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