[Report This]Date: December 28 2018 5:46 AM Title: The Shoot
Very good story, you can actually empathize with how puny the main character feels.
Date: September 17 2011 8:06 AM Title: The Shoot
Excellent. Short, sweet, and well written. I'm going to go look through your other stories now!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'll try to have some more out soon.
[Report This]Date: September 03 2011 10:10 AM Title: The Shoot
I hope you made a mistake when you put yes for completed
I'd like to see more of this
and the ending seemed a bit rushed
[Report This]Date: August 31 2011 2:08 AM Title: The Shoot
This is a fantastic start! Your writing style is great, and I can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: Thank you Sarah, I am a big fan of your the "Parlour of Little Pleasures" so I appreciate your review a lot.
[Report This]Date: August 30 2011 2:29 AM Title: The Shoot
This story is brilliant.
The interaction between the characters is novel and interesting, and the writing is excellent.
What's particularly impressive is how well the setting and the characters' backgrounds are described given how brief the story is. The scene is quite complex and the necessary background to develop it would normally be cumbersome - however, the author brilliantly paces the story using excellent dialog so we that are both able to understand the action and left in suspense.
This is exceptional, and I hope to see more!
Author's Response: Thank you for the review Azure, its always good to hear some feedback!
Date: August 27 2011 5:27 PM Title: The Shoot
Very nicely done. With that said the guy strikes me as something of a fool and it isn't because he agreed to be shrunk. A giantess is nice enough to let you explore her body without torturing or crushing you and she finally lets you go visit her flower then you decide you're done? That's just idiotic and selfish. Even with a regular woman a decent guy is going to make sure his lady's needs are well tended to and when she's the size of a mountain to you then you have even more reason to do so.
He should have taken that chance to explore, learn about and please the lady's cliterous until he knew exactly how to bring her to her peak then done so until she was torn between wanting him to stop so she could wrest or getting in one more orgasm. After all this might be the only real chance he gets to prove to her that not only letting him explore her was a good idea but she should let him do it again and more often.
Well that or at least did his best until he reached the point of exhaustion and collapsed. At least then he could say he gave it his all.
Author's Response: Haha thank for the review! I had not thought of it that way, but it is true he is kind of an idiot if you put it that way! I was so focused on the voyeuristic part of the story, I was concentrated Alex's desicion to allow it to go on or keep on shooting so I needed the end to be forced, if the guy had actally been smart and done it right I couldn't have gotten to that. Thanks for the input, I will make sure at least some of my future characters aren't fools.
[Report This]Date: August 27 2011 2:51 PM Title: The Shoot
This was very nice indeed! I hope to see more of it!
Author's Response: Thank you for the feedback, I really apreciate it, I hope to have some other nice shortstories soon!