Date: March 04 2012 10:15 PM Title: Chapter 30: A New Life Begins
Epic series so far. It's kind of mind-blowing that Carly isn't the big one in the room for once. The next chapter is going to feel so weird to read. :P
Love your stuff. Your output is humbling!
Date: March 04 2012 7:46 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
Man right when jack finally accepts his life as his sisters toy and is happy with it, sophie comes out of nowhere and shrinks carly. I really hope to see a happy ending in this story. For jack and Carly that is.
[Report This]Date: March 04 2012 3:38 PM Title: Chapter 30: A New Life Begins
I was wondering when the fact in one of the middle chapters you had jack say that he had alot of time of time to think about how he shrunk and he explained to sophie how the shrinking process worked.
i have been patiently waiting for that nugget to come back into play and finally it has.
I tend to read your stories chapters in large clumps, and this one hasnt disappointed. I like the creativity of your chapters, the jenny character is fantatisc. I enjoy the personality of the carly character. I thought she was just a sadist for awhile but you reallly helped define her more in this story.
You are an excellent author, and a creative writer. I cant wait to see how you finish this off.
Date: March 04 2012 3:38 PM Title: Chapter 30: A New Life Begins
I was wondering when the fact in one of the middle chapters you had jack say that he had alot of time of time to think about how he shrunk and he explained to sophie how the shrinking process worked.
i have been patiently waiting for that nugget to come back into play and finally it has.
I tend to read your stories chapters in large clumps, and this one hasnt disappointed. I like the creativity of your chapters, the jenny character is fantatisc. I enjoy the personality of the carly character. I thought she was just a sadist for awhile but you reallly helped define her more in this story.
You are an excellent author, and a creative writer. I cant wait to see how you finish this off.
Date: March 04 2012 12:37 AM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
You, Jacksmith, are a bastard man! How am I supposed to keep living my life day to day when I don't have the resolution of this entire series? The way I see it, there's only one option. You just have to stop writing so well so I'll stop caring about this amazing story. That's all. Please do that and get back to me, thanks.
[Report This]Date: March 03 2012 11:36 PM Title: Chapter 30: A New Life Begins
Great chapter. Very hot. But it sucks that when Jack is finally happy it could all be taken away. I cant wait to see what happens next. You are fantastic at cliffhangers.
Dave
Date: March 03 2012 8:38 PM Title: Chapter 30: A New Life Begins
wow what a great twist. This is really amazing.
Date: March 03 2012 8:24 PM Title: Chapter 30: A New Life Begins
You are a horrible man jacksmith of 222 Mockingbirg Lane, Langford Illinois.
OK silliness aside he finally gains happiness...legit happiness somehow and Sophie FINALLY decides to put 2 and 2 together. I look forward to see where this latest turn plays out.
[Report This]Date: March 03 2012 5:59 PM Title: Chapter 30: A New Life Begins
how in the hell did sophie get a hold of shrinking potion? great. just great. another plot twist. lol
aw man, i was looking forward to the chapters of jack's new life, and now sophie had to ruin it. lol well done JS.
Date: March 03 2012 3:56 PM Title: Chapter 30: A New Life Begins
Bitch had it coming. :)
That basically sums up my thoughts, lol. Now Carly can finally see the world the way Jack's tiny eyes have for the past 5 years... and that'll definitely be awesome. Glad it finally happened, and I'm really interested in Carly's fate now, what she'll experience in her shrunken form, how she'll react, etc... There's a LOT to explore there.
And Jack... dear Jack... well, I enjoyed his defiance - it really carried this story. Seems he finally became a "pet" in this chapter... I wonder if he'll become dedicated to Sohpie now, with his altered mental state... or if he'll snap back. Gotta hand it to the guy, five years of hell is long time to hold out with any shred of sanity left in ya skull.
Date: March 03 2012 2:16 PM Title: Chapter 30: A New Life Begins
Doesn't anyone lock doors anymore? I knew Sophie was going to fuck this up. I hope Jack convinces Sophie he wants things to be put back the way they were. If it's even possible to regrow Carly. Can't say Im really happy with this turn of events, been following this series from the beginning and finally Carly and Jack are happy together and didn't even last 5 seconds.
[Report This]Date: March 03 2012 1:46 PM Title: Chapter 30: A New Life Begins
I'm hoping you flash forward five years and show Carly emotionally and mentally broken just like Jack.
[Report This]Date: March 03 2012 9:50 AM Title: Chapter 30: A New Life Begins
Woah, now that's a twist right there! How is Carly going to adjust?! Things are getting interesting alright.
Date: March 03 2012 9:39 AM Title: Chapter 30: A New Life Begins
YEAH! Payback Time!
Date: March 03 2012 9:03 AM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
Wow, awesome chapter again! Great job in describing Jack's feelings, you really made the tranformation of his will totally acceptable. I also liked the change in Carly's attitude, was almost looking forward to what was up for the two next - I begged you to make Sophie save him, and now that it happened (or seemed to happen), I'm almost disappointed that we won't get to see more of that "loving bond" between those siblings ;)
It will be funny to see how Sophie reacts to Jacks complete brainwashing and his new attitude. Also, are you maybe going to go back to good old torture, only that this time a girl owns a girl? Maybe for a chapter or two ;)
Also, PLEASE make something happen that the shrinking potion and the knowledge about it never face the earth again... I really like the "compactness" of your concept, that only a few people are involved. The end of this chapter makes me afraid of maybe tens of parallel plots, because someone finds the shrinking spray and uses it one someone else again. I think I just don't like the thought of "leaving the original" characters and spectating new ones through their lives..
Date: February 29 2012 10:42 AM Title: Chapter 29: Her Toy Forever
Is that the end? I hope not 'cause I was rooting for the little guy. Hopefully, if he's enough of a computer wiz to put that program together and start a countdown, he was smart enough to put a secondary password in that would make it look like the program was eliminated, but really only set the countdown back a ways and hides it from Carly. If you want to use that idea to continue this to a happier ending then be my guest.
[Report This]Date: February 29 2012 8:28 AM Title: Chapter 29: Her Toy Forever
For me this path (if Carly isn't faking again, which is unlikely from the way she acted) is being much better than he gaining freedom and probably being subject of serious and not pleasuring research about his growing through many many years... which definitely wouldn't be the scientists goal, they would certainly be more interested in many other things about this new found shrinking man and its applications rather than his own well being. :P
If Jack and Carly try to be honest with their feelings, and mainly Jack accept this life which he seen to have now, I believe they can be happy indeed. Like I said they make a good/cute masochist couple. Even more now that they had confessed their love for each other. Jack enjoy this life, there is no deny in this anymore... and Carly too, she is crazy for him, and crazy enough to dangerously believe that she need and have the right to punish him anytime she believe he isn't understanding her or anything else. But at same time had accepted that he is the most important tiny person in her life now, her drug, he will be in good hands in her care, she really wants to take care of him forever. And Jack when facing death at her mouth, realized that he need her as much as she need him. She wants to feel loved by him and he wants to feel safe only with her. Even when Carly was being evil with him, when she handed him to Jenny he felt so incredibly helpless and scared being in another hand other than his sister, his body and mind were being honest already, he really need to feel his sister touch to feel good and safe. Thinking now as another reader said, maybe if Sophie 'rescue' him now, it will be really painful for him. I'm curious about how they will handle Sophie now that they accepted each other.
Date: February 29 2012 3:08 AM Title: Chapter 29: Her Toy Forever
Love the story! Would like to see more of both cousins. Maybe Carly can have them both over for some fun.
Date: February 28 2012 10:30 PM Title: Chapter 29: Her Toy Forever
Outstanding!
I didn't think Jack would give it to her..I mean I probably would've, but I didn't think he would. I've seen too many fake tears to belive her though.
I enjoyed Jack's determination throughout to bury Carly the tyrant and his unwillingness. This changes things but if you say the cousin is coming back, a separation from Carly may become his new torture.
[Report This]Date: February 28 2012 5:26 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
Wow, I kind of expected this would happen (otherwise his whole escape at home would have been pointless) but this still really changes the tone of the story. I think Jack's stubbornness in the face of impossible odds really caused a lot of people (including me) to root for him, now they are pretty pissed, haha.
I suspect he is going to wake up soon and discover what the he's gotten himself into. I sort of doubt he will stay broken for the rest of the story, as I think that might make him a less interesting narrator.
Plus, if Carly actually gets shrunken he needs to be sort of 'there' mentally in order to deliver that long-deserved punch in the face.