Date: April 20 2013 6:02 AM Title: Chapter 1
Hey there. I'm quite surprised you made her so small, seeing as a larger girl would be more fun for another girl to have inside her. I mean, half an inch, she'd struggle to feel it. Three or four inches would be a lot more interesting, I feel.
Otherwise though, it was a good read. I also read a lot of this sorta stuff on Writing.com, and it's rarely (if ever) as detailed as this. You put a lot of thought into it, and a lot of a story into just a few thousand words. Nicely done. :3
Date: August 22 2011 3:22 AM Title: Chapter 1
Really nice little story here. I do kind a hope you continue it. Great descriptions and the characters are well done for the amount of room you had they each had a personality.
There's not a very good chance that I will continue it, at least not any time soon. And if I do, it'll be more like a sequel, with different characters, and there will not likely be any insertion, I hope that doesn't dissapoint you too much! Thanks for your review!
Date: August 21 2011 7:58 PM Title: Chapter 1
i'm not a fan of insertion, so rating this wouldn't be fair, but i will say that the general set-up of the story involving the crumbling psyche of Megan was well done for the short span, the dialogue was believable, and things were described well. i did find it a tiny bit odd that Megan just popped out of her admirer and said "i love you" but i also realize that you were trying to do a one-chapter story, and in that you succeeded; it works fine as a standalone
I'm typically not a huge insertion fan, unless it's done in a very specific context, and I'm not even sure I quite achieved that context with this story, but it was fun to try. Megan's words at the end were intended to be the cliffhanger that leaves you wondering "Does she really love her, or is she just saying that in hopes of being restored?" Thanks for your review, your comments are always appreciated, as is your honesty for not rating it.
Date: August 21 2011 6:45 PM Title: Chapter 1
It's nice that Meggan finally realized that fighting isn't getting her anywhere in this situation. Rather then fighting against Nikki perhaps she should try finding out what buttons gets her the most gentle treatment.
That might be the truth, or maybe she really does love Nikki? Who knows!
Date: August 21 2011 12:45 PM Title: Chapter 1
I loved it! Very sensual. I was sort of going for something sensual like this with the "massage" story, but I think you've easily out done me! Keep it up!
Thanks! I took a huge risk with this story, and I'm glad to see it is well recieved. I'll check out your story and tell you what I think!