[Report This]Date: June 30 2015 10:19 PM Title: It Begins
Sheesh...
It was a great story, but talk about a cruel and ironic twist of fate that the cure for it comes out right after he dies...
Good stuff, just wish it wasn't such a downer of an ending (but I understand why you chose to go that route).
[Report This]Date: May 20 2012 5:29 PM Title: It Begins
Loved the story! But you should write more stories, involving a dad and daughter or something like that.
Author's Response:
I've actually been thinking about that, but I just can't get the spark to write it, mainly because I don't know where I'd want the story to go, what all I want to have happen in it, but that's for the support.
[Report This]Date: December 17 2011 6:45 AM Title: It Begins
I would really like to see an incest chapter between James and his mom. If you're not comfortable with that kind of thing though then don't worry bout it ;) great story! Look forward to your next chapter
[Report This]Date: September 28 2011 10:15 PM Title: It Begins
im just rating the chapter XDD
[Report This]Date: September 24 2011 3:53 PM Title: It Begins
I do enjoy this story and appreciate the updates. The narration inside her head is great and is fun to read. Some helpful suggestions would be to really, really try and make your chapters longer. I would also stop leaving such huge spaces in between paragraphs, as it's kind of distracting. I know you said you had writer's block awhile back, but just realize that no one is perfect and most of us would honestly seee you punch out more chapters and take this thing to a conclusion than have to wait a month in between updates. Bottome line: Don't be so hard on yourself!
I like the shrinking virus affecting all males now, as it's going to allow for you to expand upon the story. That said, I would try and keep it primarily about this nuculear family, as it's more manageable to finish. Obviously, as a foot guy, I really hope to see the brother absolutely demoralized and crushed emotionally from being his sister's little toe toy! Keep up the good work!
Author's Response:
Thank you for your advice and constructive critisism, as for the spacing between paragraphs I use a single space betwee the paragraphs unless there is a time skip, then I use " * " to signify the space. I will try to update sooner, but I also work night shift so I'm often asleep most of the day, or I just don't have time to write it, this chapter in particular had been baking in my mind this entire time.
Date: September 19 2011 10:53 AM Title: It Begins
Hi,
i must say your story ist really really good. Especially the diary of his sister is terrific.
Please hurry up to write more of it. The best is, that her brother doesn't like to shrink and she gets exited about it. I hope he stops shirking at 4-8 iches and she wears him all day in special places... Go on! you are on a very good way.
Author's Response:
Haha, thank you for the kind review, and he'll be smaller than 4inches when the shrinking is finished.
Date: September 09 2011 4:08 PM Title: It Begins
Overall a great story but feels too slow in my opinion. Expected her to do a little more to her brother by now. The whole doctor visit just feels like a distraction instead of getting into what she would do to her brother. As for the diaries, I feel that they do not help with the story instead they may provide her viewpoint but I personally think they should be used less often. Personally, I think you should get back to what should is going to do. I am interested to see what may happen to him when he gets smaller.
Author's Response:
I'm trying to make it semi-realistic and in a realistic situation he probably would've been taken to a clinic when he first started shrinking. And the diary entires help us to see her side of things as far as what is going through her mind as she watches her brother dwindle down to almost nothing, as she also finds the sexual charge from being able to completely dominate him.
Date: August 18 2011 6:19 PM Title: It Begins
I like the story but I think it would cool if you played it in two ways. One on the prospective of the main shrunken character. Then have a prospective of the giantess. i am not a huge fan of the dairy type enteries. I think you'd make a kickass piece of playing out the scenes instead of telling them. Draws the readers in more that way,
Author's Response:
Well, I'm trying to give the perspective from both accounts in a unique way. Everyone often just writes out the story from the tiny person's perspective, and rarely from the giantess' perspective, and if they do it's usually either sloppily switched between the two, or they put titles above the text to inform us of who's perspective they're following and it never looks professional, or very clean. Which is why most people only write things from the smaller person's prospective. And the diary eneteries are my way of allowing the reader to see things from both perspectives. Showing not only the usual humilation and overall degrading of the smaller character, but also how it's effecting the larger character.
I wanted to give my story a unique twist, and the diary enteries just seems to be something different, I've only ever seen it done once, but it was souly from the giantess prospective, which is all fine and dandy, but we don't get to often see how the events effect the character's in parrallel with each other, and I felt the diary enteries helped give us some insite into the mind of the bigger person.
[Report This]Date: August 18 2011 2:49 PM Title: It Begins
Great addition. I think you are making a good decision to maintain the inner monolog/diary of the sister, as it allows us to see how seemingly torn she is between satisfying her taboo enjoyment of her brother's helplessness, with her love of him in general. I think you've done a good job of showing his growing pathectness, and he seems to be losing his status as a brother to his sister. She seems to be seeing him more and more as a pet, soon-to-be pleasure toy. I can't wait to see him at her abject mercy of her feet and hope you are able to describe in gruesome detail how much of an ordeal this wll be for him! Keep it up!
Author's Response:
Thank you for the well thought out review, I'm glad you're enjoying the story, and thank you for telling me your thoughts about the diary chapters of the story. I'm glad that they're being recieved so well.
Date: August 17 2011 6:53 PM Title: It Begins
I like your story keep it up.
I am waiting here 24/7, for any new chapters!!
I wish you all the best
XD
Author's Response:
lol 24/7 eh, tell me how do you go to the bathroom if you're sitting at your computer that long? :P Just kidding, thanks for the review I'm glad you enjoy it.
[Report This]Date: July 31 2011 9:39 PM Title: It Begins
real nice keep it up
Date: July 31 2011 6:30 PM Title: It Begins
Excellent chapter, he keeps getting smaller and will soon be able to fit in her socks.
[Report This]Date: July 23 2011 11:48 AM Title: It Begins
I like this story and think that, if you really stick with it and take time to build up tension and the forth-coming intereactions between the brother and sister, that this could become a nice little classic. I think the diary stuff is absolutely a good thing to use here, as it gives us the sister's perspective. I think giving us some humiliating scenes each time he hits a new low in terms of height is key. We all know that he'll eventually end up at an inch and likely be degraded beyond belief at her feet, but leading up to that stuff is important to. You have talent, so please keep up the good work!
Author's Response:
Thank you very much for the view, yours is by far the most helpful as far as giving me your thoughts to help improve the story, I will take your advice and I'll use it.
[Report This]Date: July 23 2011 12:42 AM Title: It Begins
PLEASE MAKE HIM HAVE IN A CHEER LEADER PARTY!
Author's Response:
I think not.
Date: July 21 2011 11:07 PM Title: It Begins
Really enjoying the story so far. I hope he does end up in her socks. She should wear him in them to school all day.
Date: July 21 2011 7:04 PM Title: It Begins
I love the story. The only part I don't like is the wait for the next chapter. Keep up the good work can't wait till he is really small and for the sister to start doing the things she is thinking about.
Author's Response:
Haha, I'm glad you're enjoying the story thank you for your support.
Date: July 14 2011 12:53 AM Title: It Begins
hey more of this would be awesome and add some cleavage to the storie like when he shrinks fully
Author's Response:
Haha, I plan to do more than that when he's fully shrunk.
[Report This]Date: July 10 2011 2:05 PM Title: It Begins
This was a very good intro, I love the conflict quickly pre-established and the shrinking teaser reached by the end. I do like the description of the sister (spoken as a breast man :P) though as someone mentioned would like a little more context, such as age, but I understand you will provide.
I can't wait to read on about how his sister treats him!
Date: July 10 2011 9:58 AM Title: It Begins
I liked the begining, can't wait for the next chapters
good job