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Reviewer: Mars Frog Signed [Report This]
Date: August 29 2011 10:30 AM Title: Innocent Musings over Breakfast

I'm usually not too big on unaware scenarios, but this story was an exception for me. Mostly because of how well the parents plight and characters were portrayed. Anita in particular, being a mother who - while shrunken and scared out of her mind - was worried, and even inspired, for the wellbeing of her daughter. That was very good. The only thing I had trouble imagining was the exact size of the parents. i knew they were pretty tiny, but it was a bit difficult to put into my mind just how tiny exactly.

Great job overall though, keep up the good writing.



Author's Response:

One of my consistent problems as a writer is getting consistent size.  I never clearly identified it, but but Frank was slightly larger than Anita, and Anita was likely about the size of a grain of salt or so, making Frank maybe half of a millimeter.  I'm glad yopu enjoyed it though!  Emotion is a huge part of my writing.  Thanks for your review!

Reviewer: Knot Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: August 28 2011 8:49 PM Title: Innocent Musings over Breakfast

So nice to see a story wrapped up. Also really interesting to see a more detailed critique like the one below...typically, on a site such as this, people shy away from in-depth analysis due to the nature of the beast. I simply like to encourage authors who write well, and in the sub-genre that appeals to me the most, and that would describe you perfectly. Sometimes, endings are obvious for a reason; outside of magical outside intervention, nothings doing. I enjoyed the alternating scenes, I think that changing it up was wise. I hope you keep on with these stories, as I have said before, I am a fan.



Author's Response:

Thanks!  I do appreciate a good critique, it keeps me humble!  Please continue to read, my next story will probably be another short, one chapter.  Look forward to hearing from you again!

Reviewer: F_G_F Signed [Report This]
Date: August 20 2011 8:38 AM Title: Innocent Musings over Breakfast

I enjoyed the deliberate and methodical descriptions in your story, especially for the mother since her situation is a little more dire than the father's.  It allows your readers to empathize with the character, or I suppose even grow excited about his/her demise. I hope that you will add another chapter.  It seemed this ended with a note of resolve by the mother.  I'd love to see how she's going to get out of this mess!



Author's Response:

Thanks!  Though I hope none of the readers are excited about the demise of either parent...lol.  You'll know how things turn out for them both only a few short hours after I do, haha.

Reviewer: jacksmith5996 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 19 2011 10:03 PM Title: Innocent Musings over Breakfast

figured i owed you a bounce-back review.  i've said this before, but so far you're really the only micro/voyeur-based writer i've been able to read the content and enjoy it as much as the genres i'm generally more comfortable in.  i like the uncomplicated nature of this one; no tangled plot to follow, just a clean-cut, description-rich little tale.  good work.



Author's Response:

Thanks a lot!  I'm glad you enjoy it.  I will probably write the final chapter of this one sometime this weekend.  I appreciate the rate and review!

Reviewer: Asukafan2001 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 22 2011 12:15 PM Title: Innocent Musings over Breakfast

great start good descriptions. Can't wait for chapter two.



Author's Response:

Thanks.  Sorry it took so long to reply, but I really appreciate the five stars!

Reviewer: bizyboy00 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 20 2011 5:59 PM Title: Innocent Musings over Breakfast

Awesome job so far!  Playful teenage feet = hot as hell!  Keep up the great work!



Author's Response:

I appreciate that!  This story doesn't have as much foot play as I normally use...I'll probably do something more in that genre later.  Thanks!

Reviewer: jacksmith5996 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: June 18 2011 9:54 PM Title: Innocent Musings over Breakfast

I tend not to like unaware/micro a great deal, but this is well-written enough that i found myself enjoying it. Very good stuff.

Reviewer: psychotropic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 17 2011 4:09 PM Title: Innocent Musings over Breakfast

I like where this is going... I hope to see more!



Author's Response:

Glad to hear it!  And you will!

Reviewer: fairway1 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 17 2011 1:48 AM Title: Innocent Musings over Breakfast

Really really great so far. Fantastic detail. Keep it up! I want to read more.



Author's Response:

I'll do my best!  Just thought I'd see how this would work...apparently it's not bad at all!  Thanks.

Reviewer: Knot Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 17 2011 12:39 AM Title: Innocent Musings over Breakfast

This is great. You keep writing, and I'll keep reading. And loving it.



Author's Response:

You keep reading and loving it, I'll keep writing it. ;)

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