[Report This]Date: May 17 2011 10:34 AM Title: Chapter 1
Awesome, just awesome. Love the humor and the villainy of Mrs. Swan.
Date: May 13 2011 3:57 AM Title: Chapter 4
I think that I shall never see
A neck so nice in '53.
Date: May 13 2011 3:51 AM Title: Chapter 3
I guess I have to plug the fact that, as a Christian, I don't believe in suicide, but I tend not to think of the ramifications of being eaten, when I indulge these fantasy tales.
"Hard to swallow?" another great pun.
Waking up in her mouth/throat and the use of the mirror are two great scene ideas.
[Report This]Date: May 13 2011 3:46 AM Title: Chapter 2
He's called David SMALL, and he "shrank into the lower deck/???" in chapter 1. Great puns,be they intentional or not.
Is there a reason you chose the 1953 setting? To me it combines great elements of film noir imagery in my mind with gts vore.
Ian Fleming was a nice touch too. Casino Royale (his first) came out in 1953.
Roald Dahl couldn't have done better than this.
Date: May 13 2011 3:41 AM Title: Chapter 1
As soon as I saw the name Pope Eddie (author of How Mrs Ryder ate Peter), I knew I had to read this.
Hopefully Mrs Swan's mouth won't smell of cigarettes at the potent moments no doubt coming up in this yarn. I'm off to chapter 2.