[Report This]Date: August 23 2020 10:43 PM Title: Chapters 1-9
Iv read over 600 stories to date and only given personl feedback to a select few.
The desriptive aspect of this storie was good. I really liked the emphasis on the smell and sound aspect of the storie. i personally like feet related storeis. foot related stories are genarlly great when describing and creating the scenes about power dynamics and sounds and smells.
The charictors are intresting.i always say nothing is a greater play on roles like a mother and son dynamic.
As mentioned previously i have read alot of storie by many professionals and it seems from the two stroies iv seen you really excel with foot realted work(Basied on the nature of how descriptive you need to be when setting the scene for foot related content)
I have more feedback for you and would love to see some more of your work to get a better feel for your style. do you have any more finished or unfinished content/ideas you can send me? ill email you the rest of my feedback.
Look forward to hearing from you.
Date: June 23 2018 8:22 AM Title: Chapter 4
a story about a mother that murders her son is just sick if you like writing stuff like this there's something wrong
[Report This]Date: September 07 2017 5:16 PM Title: Chapter 3
readimg about aparent who enjoys murdering there only kid is perverted. if this so called story was ment to be sexy you have along way to go.YOU could at lest had her punished what kind of person would want to read about parent like that i tought it was going to be about a mom who makes her son a sex toy boy was i wrong please dont write about mother kills a son she loves
Date: April 05 2017 3:12 AM Title: Chapters 1-9
Hello. And Bye.
Date: March 19 2017 7:57 AM Title: Chapters 1-9
Hello. And Bye.
Date: May 25 2014 3:49 PM Title: Chapters 1-9
Thank you for this brilliant story Jay! I really like how you portray who Jeremy's mother change personality. And the smile when she have when she draws all the lust from her son..! Look forward to your next take in this genre =)
Date: August 21 2013 12:01 PM Title: Chapters 1-9
Hey, thanks so much for reviewing this ancient tale of mine! You taking the time to read it and give your opinion means a lot. Also, thanks for the kind words. I have been a fan of the mother-son, sister-brother genres for a long time. I have a personal history that hit close to home growing up, so there was a lot of internal engergy to write a story that showcased my fetish. I remember getting to the end and thinking I would write multiple endings. However, I decided that I was just too tired and wanted to end it in accordance with how I most imagined such a scenario would turn out. I started another story years ago, entitled "Daddy's Fatal Attraction," but it was lost once the GTSandFeet board was hacked and went down. The Den of Smelly Feet also lost their section for stories like this, so that one will remain a missed opportunity for me. At some point, I will write something new. I for one am looking forward to you take on the mother/son stuff again soon!
[Report This]Date: July 30 2013 7:36 AM Title: Chapters 1-9
I've read this enough times that, even though it's a bit older, I feel I owe you a review, especially since you've been vocal about my own work. This was actually one of the first stories I read on the site, and it's certainly one of my favorite mother/son stories here. You often mention in your reviews the kinds of scenarios you like, and you're actually damn decent at crafting them yourself. The foot action is all vindictive fun and you do a nice job playing off the twisted and worsening relationship of the characters. I honestly could've seen this story going on further, maybe showing a way that Timmy is able to grow to a normal size again, only to have Jane decide she wanted him small again, but if something's gotta end, it's gotta end, and it's your thing. I also really love the normal-sized build-up to the actual shrinking where you have Timmy scheming up ways to get closer to his mother's feet, such as telling her to wear her work shoes to the restaurant just so she'll want a massage later. Great stuff. You also illustrate the characters very well, showing Timmy's incredibly neurotic awkwardness in contrast with his mother's sweet and loving yet unintentionally domineering personality.
I have two small critiques I would be remiss to not mention. One is that I wish you'd found a different way to kick off the shrinking part of the story other than Timmy being stupid enough to have a written diary called "My Fantasies" left out in the open. As you do such a nice job on other elements of the backstory build-up, I think you could've done something stronger there. Finally, this is a small thing, but I wish you hadn't kept referring to Timmy's upcoming death throughout the story. It would've made the mother's fateful choice at the end much more surprising and impactful if we hadn't known prior to that about it.
Still though this is a very solid effort and one I find myself coming back to more and more. If you ever return to writing I'd love to see another one from this genre.
[Report This]Date: January 19 2011 6:40 AM Title: Chapters 1-9
it's the best story i have ever read! hill806 had a good idea!please you must write a sequel!
Date: May 17 2010 4:52 PM Title: Chapter 4
i meant kills then both not kiss lol
[Report This]Date: May 17 2010 4:50 PM Title: Chapter 4
omg to me that was the best story i have read in along time and i diddnt want it to end. fantastic work, i loved how his mum turned from this fantastic caring sweet mother into this menacing evil unemotional woman who tortured him in amazing brutal ways. I couldnt help feeling really sorry for timmy though. i would love to see you do 2 sequals to this, the 1st sequal would be where she does the same thing to the guy shes getting with. Also he could be a player and is secretly married with a teenage son tht reminds her of timmy so she tortures him too and eventually kiss them both. The 2nd sequal i would like to see is say 10 years in the future where she regrets killing timmy as shes to old to have kids and finds a way to go back in time to save her son from herself, perhaps before the 3 years she tortured him or maybe a week before she killed him. would be nice to maybe see timmy get rescued. lol please dont stop writing the best story, i think it could be a great series ;)
Date: December 21 2009 11:44 PM Title: Chapter 4
This was a pretty good story. I really liked the way Jane slowly excepted and then rellished in her tiny son's fate.
[Report This]Date: March 21 2008 3:12 AM Title: Chapters 1-9
Good work, I really enjoyed it.
Date: July 31 2007 4:48 PM Title: Chapter 10
Very good story so far.