[Report This]Date: December 11 2010 8:03 PM Title: Chapter 1
You never disappoint, enjoyed this as much as the others, you're possibly my favourite writer on here, I like the description you use, and you fit it in well in such a short story, "she felt the thick juices of his insides ooze out into the wrinkles of her sole" for example, is just a fantastic piece of descriptive writing, keep up the good work.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the compliments ^_^ It really means a lot, and i'm glad you enjoy my writing so much :)
Date: December 09 2010 2:17 PM Title: Chapter 1
Not bad. I would suggest having speech on separate lines to make the story easier to read. Also, you somehow managed to submit this story 3 times.
Emma is the visualization of an oxymoron... so sweet, yet so deadly at the same time. To think I was expect the goddess to be benevolent...
Author's Response:
Yeah it got posted 3 times because the site kept giving me a server error on the additional Authors box, despite having nothing in there so i tried refreshing and it threw me back to the blank submitting form each time. I only just found out how to delete the other two submissions.
Normally i do edit the doc to put speech and text on separate lines but i copy/pasted this from my facebook page and by the time the site actually told me it had accepted the story i couldn't be bothered messing about with it any more.
Thanks for taking the time to reveiw though.