Reviews For Feet of Strength
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Reviewer: Jerry3458 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 01 2011 10:56 PM Title: Grindhouse

Yumm, crazy bitch story...
I like how she says that 'we're' going to the movies. Meaning he has to suffer beneath turbulent sweaty feet for hours while she badmouths him to her friends. I don't doubt that after three months taped to that mule, he'll be broken. I wonder how often she wears mules, as opposed to other footwear?

Reviewer: flospring Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 05 2011 8:54 AM Title: Grindhouse

real good short story!will you continue it? it could be great!

Reviewer: crazyboy Signed [Report This]
Date: December 11 2010 10:48 AM Title: Grindhouse

Awesome love it can't wait to read more.

Reviewer: pseudoaddiction7 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 06 2010 5:02 PM Title: Grindhouse

Constructive criticism: I think that Tonya's boredom, as you establish in your opening paragraph, doesn't remain consistent during the story. Does Bobby's begging make her more interested in torturing him?

I also think it's weird that you would still describe Tonya as beautiful even though she's clearly gone a little crazy here.

Like 'She kept looking at me with her beautiful brown eyes'. What about 'with a crazed look in her eye'? She seems very resolved and not interested enough in what she's doing. Just saying.

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 04 2010 10:05 PM Title: Grindhouse

violently erotic, an im thirsty for more.

aaron

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