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Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 08 2012 1:12 PM Title: Chapter 3, One More For The Road

This is my favorite chapter yet. I love sexy older women. Cannot wait to see what happens next.
An I loved the part where Carolyn found them fucking in stephanie's drawer an just before they finished she plucks them up between her fingers. An then she tells them to fuck while on her palm an doesnt let them finish again, sexy as hell. Eventhough this chapter wasn't very long or feeture very many feet/toe scenes I still loved it. An glad that you are sill posting for this story.
I really can't wait till they get to the big easy, but then again the drive is probably gonna be a lot of fun as well.
At any rate great story an I hope to see more of Carolyn.

aaron
Ps an I really loved how Joe painted Sarah's toenails too just wish that you went into a little more detail. An what color is Carolyn's toenails?

Author's Response:

Thanks for commenting.  Glad you enjoyed Carolyn's chapter, aaron.  Very little of the plot was pre ordained, and just sprung forth from a twisted cell cluster.  I have brainwaved two, maybe three more extensive chapters to Joe's story and could contain much romance, racketeering, and wrestling.

 

Ps-In this chapter Carolyn is wearing Antique Rose polish on her lovable toes, applied a few days earlier by her one inch pedicure artists. 

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 21 2012 9:18 PM Title: Double date with DD

so glad to see this story again. hopes there is more of stephanies mom to come.

aaron
ps its like it hasnt been that long at all, the chapters flow beautifully.

Author's Response:

Thanks for reading, aaron.  I am looking forward to penning the final chapter, which will include some real high drama to accompany my usual favorite, high romance.  Carolyn, Stephanie's mother, is intrigued by the way she feels when she holds the tiny man and woman, and how they respond to her gentle touch. Anything can happen here :)

Reviewer: rubkair Signed [Report This]
Date: January 04 2007 1:57 PM Title: The Voodoo Cheeseburger

Nice and well told

Reviewer: litlpeta Signed [Report This]
Date: May 10 2006 11:36 AM Title: The Voodoo Cheeseburger

I loved this story very much. I ennjoy the way both tinies become addicted to serving Stephanie's giant needs and how she seduces them. I love when both
are begging close to tears to be granted the pleasure to make love to her.

And I enjoyed the kind benevolence of the giant teen who cares for the little ones. There is a lot of mutual affection in this story and pleasure and delight seems to be winning
of any "clear-minded" reasonability.

Author's Response: Obviously, we think alike, litlpeta. I will add a new chapter within one month. Ranger Joe is not done yet. Also, I have corrected a large number of grammer errors in chapter one today. I was pretty sloppy until I employed my programs checking features. thanks for the input

Reviewer: Asukafan2001 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 09 2006 1:00 PM Title: The Voodoo Cheeseburger

Wow, great story. I really like how you spent the early part of the story developing everyone and then slowly unleashed the story.


I was going to comment on the lack of paragraphing but i see you fixed that. It really makes a huge difference.


The character development is pretty good, but a little bit more would have helped solidify stephanie and sarah.



Overall though great story and I am looking forward to more.

Author's Response: I am honored by your kind words and appreciate your input, Asukafan2001. Today I used a grammer check feature and discovered much sloppyness which I will try to avoid in the future. I upload the corrected file. I do plan a chapter 2 within a month, and possibly a final chapter 3 dealing with the big trip to New Orleans in search of salvation. Thanks.

Reviewer: Vord Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 09 2006 12:23 AM Title: The Voodoo Cheeseburger

The story is pretty awesome, love reading the parts where the teen girl loves , make love, and protects the park ranger and the teacher. But the grammar sort of threw me off. But all in all, like the story.

Author's Response: I apologize for the sloppyness of the story, Vord. Today I uploaded it again after having my word processing progams grammer checker do its work. It was amazing how clumsy I was. I do plan a chapter 2 release within one month. Ranger Joe is not done yet. Personally, I have difficulty envisioning stories involving a violent end. Mutual love conquers all. thanks

Reviewer: DX Machina Signed starhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 07 2006 11:57 PM Title: The Voodoo Cheeseburger

I'm sorry, this might be a good story, but I just couldn't quite get over the lack of paragraphs and grammar issues.

Author's Response: Thank you for your input, DX Machina. I now have edited my story into paragraphs and cleaned up a few other things I missed. Please give "Joe's Tiny Adventures" another try before you jettison it to the trash heap of history.

Reviewer: SafetyPin Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 07 2006 7:09 PM Title: The Voodoo Cheeseburger

Good story. Please continue.

One suggestion; divide it up into more paragraphs in order to make it easier to read.

Author's Response: Thanks for the advice, SafetyPin.

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