That was fun but felt a little fast and I would of liked spending a little more time enjoying each one.. seems like it could of been expanded.. also you kept switching between the reader's perspective as in you do this and you see this and switching back to jake sees this and jake does this.. it was a little distracting.. but I'm really enjoying the story so far, thank you!

Author's Response:

i made it fast because i wanted to get every girl in the chapter.  in another chapter some characters will be more detailed but i wanted to get back to the main storyline.

also i noticed what you said about the switched POV's but didnt see much of a problem.  i just changed two sentences but besides those, there wasnt much to be altered. but thanks for letting me know anyway.