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Reviewer: breastclimber Signed [Report This]
Date: January 22 2024 4:44 AM Title: God Brad

I had a realization about the problems Camila is likely to cause.   Being a non-believer if any of the other 3 female gods find out about her they might want to kill her, and I bet Brad will end up defending her life.



Author's Response:

Especially true for Melissa. If Brad cares for Camila, he'll do whatever he can to protect her, or to convert her. I'm really excited to see how this unfolds.

Reviewer: sanguine tangerine Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 21 2024 9:48 AM Title: God Brad

I would worship Hailee, but I’d get a beer with Brad



Author's Response:

I love this comment! Succinct and accurate :)

Reviewer: It Was Me Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 21 2024 7:50 AM Title: God Brad

It really depends on what perspective we're talking about when it comes to which god I would worship.

If we're assuming ourselves to be the average person within this world, without the knowledge provided by a narrative, I'd have to go with Hailee. She certainly comes off as the mist genuine and down to earth amongst the gods, and finding a god that understands the problems of the common worshipper and doesn't place herself above them more than necessary would be pretty important to me.

Now, as a reader, Hailee would actually rank third for me.

Count me as a Lexi worshipper. I share her views on good deeds and really respect that she wants to help those most in need but refuses to accept credit for it. Noy only that, but it seems like she wants people to like her but feels like it's cheap to use good deeds to convince people to become devoted to her, even when she's doing it for the right reason.

Her rough exterior doesn't exactly attract a lit of adoration, however, which is why I think she's gone the fear route. She would rather be feared and respected than loved by people who don't know who actually she is. I also think there's some bitterness to her on this as well, as I think people maybe didn't accept her as she is or misjudged who she is when she was a mortal. I'm not 100 percent on that, but that's a vibe I get from her character.

I think this is what made her take an interest in Emma. The reporter sought out a story about Lexi's secret good works (not realizing it was her, obviously), which didn't much interest the goddess. But when Emma told her to tell her "boss" thanks when it seemed like the story was dead, that meant something to Lexi. Emma legitimately appreciated what "The Silent Samaritan" was doing, not just to heap praise on her or for the self-interest of getting a story, but because the mortal really believed that what the Samaritan was doing was a good thing and that we need that in the world. That was something real, and I think that spoke to Lexi, who's clearly intolerant of any bullshit.

But yeah, having a better (yet still far from complete) understanding of her worldview definitely puts me on Team Lexi. I feel for her need to be accepted, respect that she's not willing to change who she is or show off to get that acceptance, and can accept myself why she needs to intimidate mortals into worshipping her.

As for all the people she's killed (and Brad, too), I'll reserve judgment on that until we have a better understanding of the gods' powers. One reviewer suggested that maybe all the people Lexi killed were intentionally targeted and deserving, and we've seen examples of the gods knowing details of the lives of individual mortals, so this could be possible (I did wonder if that bus driving under her high heel was more about showing her scale or hinting at her being more selective on where she was stepping). I need to know more about how omnipotence works in this universe before committing to an opinion on that, though.

Speaking of Brad, I'm a big fan of that guy, too. While Hailee seems the most down to earth to outsiders, he's clearly the that in reality. He didn't even like being prayed to when he was playing the role of arrogant, sex-obsessed god.

I thought you guys set him up really well, too. Both Emma and Lexi made him sound like a dousche in Lexi's chapter, and the start of his own seemed to reinforce that at first glance. Now, the common man getting lost in trying to be something he's nit is a pretty common theme, but you guys disguised it really well here, and it kind of hit me out of nowhere when he started feeling less confident around Roxxy and Candy.

From that point on, Brad has been extremely likable (I love how he not only didn't get pissed at Allen refusing to believe he's a god but took responsibility for accidentally screwing the worshipper over and helped him get to Hailee).

I'm pulling for things to work out with him and Camila (although I'm not sure what exactly Lexi's feelings are about him), and I'm pretty curious if he can get away from her before revealing that he's that jerk god that she hates.

Oh, and the fact that he's worried and not mad that Camila is a nonbeliever has me really intrigued. Between that and Melissa eating nonbelievers, I'm very curious why it's so important to them that everyone worship one of them. I was thinking that this was a source of power for them, but Brad not being into it has me questioning that just a bit.

As for Melissa, I don't dislike her, but she's my least favorite among the gods. She never seems to miss an opportunity to show off her power or remind mortals that she's above them. She also is super strict about praying (the way she reprimanded that teacher for not teaching his students how to immediately start praying in her presence was kind of insane). She made those people on the cruise pray to her for, what, 45 minutes straight. What a perky move!

I do think she's a good person deep down, and she clearly cares about her family. I also imagine that she was probably a little arrogant before her godhood and the power has just gone to her head in a way that it hasn't for the other three gods.

I do wonder if Carlos "bows" to any of the other gods. If not, I wonder if there will come a time when Melissa will hold him to the same standard as those nonbelievers on the cruise. That probably depends on whether there was more to her doing that than simply putting mortals in their place.

Going back to Hailee, I do kind of feel for her. I don't think it was stated outright, but it was implied that Jay broke up with her after (and very likely because of) her ascension. If that's true, then that makes Hailee's actions most of the time all the more admirable. She's looking out for everyone else while she suffers, instead of using her power to take out her frustrations on the world.

Of course, that doesn't excuse what she did to Grace and Jay. Again, I can empathize with her being heartbroken, but between threatening Grace with eternal damnation and playing with the idea of taking away Jay's freewill, the depth of her obsession is really out of character for her. I  her defense, though, from what little we saw of Jay, he does seem worthy of her obsession.

Also, while Grace doesn't deserve what Hailee put her through, that adversity showed, at least to me, that she's not nearly as dedicated to Jay as he is to her. He's willing to defy a god for her, but Grace wanted to call off the wedding before Hailee did anything too crazy. I get that Hailee is a goddess, but I would think she'd be willing to fight for Jay a little bit.

So I'm kind of torn on whether Hailee deserves to end up with Jay or if that's even the best outcome for her. I'm guessing (and hoping) that we'll get more background into what happened to their relationship.

And who knows, maybe Allen will take her mind off Allen, at least for a little while.

One really minor critique (if you can even count it as that) is that I don't know if I would have divulged such a major part of the plot in the story summary. It doesn't  necessarily hurt the story to know that the gods were given their power to fight an intergalactic threat, but leaving us in the dark about that would have left us with another mystery to unravel, and that reveal would have probably been pretty surprising since the story so far focuses so much on the gods' trying to balance their divine power with their humanity.

But overall, this story is really, really good so far. It's extremely creative, well put together, and presents the reader with some thought-provoking philosophical questions. I look forward to seeing where you guys take it from here!



Author's Response:

Excellent review! Your insights into all the gods are spot on. I’m actually surprised how much you got right with Alexandra. The details like her not crushing the bus full of tourist, her taking a shine on Emma, and her proclivities to help people without attention. More to the last point, she really cares for people that are struggling in life, helps them in secret—sometimes her good deeds getting mis-attributed to other gods. Alexandra isn’t seeking adulation from the world. She does the right thing, because it’s right. BUT, as a complex god, and you nailed the head with this observation, there’s some bitterness from a past life that’s manifested to vigilante justice against ultra-rich and corrupt businessmen. I’m looking forward to seeing her relationship with Emma unfold. Because I predict Emma is going to play a big role in Alexandra’s life.

On the topic of Brad … I was super close to making him a one-dimensional Chad type god. My first draft of him was like that. But me and the other guy were chatting about him, and the idea came up—what if Brad was a nerd before becoming a god? And then boom, 16K words later, you got the Brad chapter. I imagined a guy who gets caught up with god-powers, has a lot of fun with it, but realizes how hollow his life had become. His story alone could be a stand-alone novel. But since I’m juggling a huge cast, his character development was sped up. Still, I’m excited to see his blossoming relationship with Camila. I can’t wait to see her reaction to learning he’s a god.

Melissa. I hope my next chapter explains Melissa a little better. I’m trying hard to tell a story of an all-powerful god that’s also a mom. She’s super strict with her rules, but deep-down, she’s a loving mother and gives people a lot of chances. She’s essentially living two lives: one as a god of all gods, and two, her home life with a son that hates that she’s a god. Like I said, I hope the next chapter reveals more about her.

And then there’s Hailee. I’m trying to imagine a young woman with unlimited god powers who gets dumped by her boyfriend, for having said powers. How would she react? I think the teasing with Grace, no matter how you see it, is appropriate for her character. I’m pretty sure Hailee will mature and learn to let Jay and Grace live their lives. But her jealousy, and unlimited powers, might wreak some more havoc before she learns that lesson. I don’t know. I recognize I need to work on Hailee more. It’s surprising, but not really, how little love Hailee’s getting.

Thank you for your critique on the story summary. I am struggling with what to put there. There is an over-arching story about an inter-galactic threat, and god’s powers being transferred between civilizations—but as you can see, my story focuses on the character arcs more. Agh! I don’t want to mislead people, but I do want to show this is a story, story. Not just a quick smut rag. I don’t know. I’ll keep thinking about.

Thanks again for your awesome comment. I hope you enjoy future installments!


Reviewer: Some giantess fan Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: January 20 2024 2:00 PM Title: God Brad

My opinions on each god: 
(Personally, I really like how each god is not who they initially seem) 

  • Melissa initially looked the most stable god, but she might actually be the biggest control freak of the bunch, and will thus likely not accept any changes in the status quo where she is on top; 
  • Hailee is the one I just can't figure out. On one end, she is clearly controlling like Melissa, but she is also aware of her faults and seeing a psychiatrist. For now, I'm guessing that she is just possessive and cannot handle someone else taking what's "hers"; 
  • Alexandra, I think, is clearly just high on getting worshipped, be it out of devotion or fear. However, her interactions with Emma and Brad do reveal that there is more to her; 
  • Brad is probably the most relatable of the bunch and thus probably the one we are gonna spend the most time with. 

MY PREDICTIONS: 
With the title being "Divinity Lost", I'm guessing that Brad will gradually lose his godhood as he lives a mortal life and this will create a power vacuum between the remaining goddesses as they vie to obtain the souls of Brad's former worshippers. 

Since Alexandra is the one whom Brad will be worshipping, I'm guessing that she will (accidentally) absorb his powers, immediately giving her a leg up on the others.
This will piss off Melissia, who will no longer be the top goddess, prompting her to increase her followers. 
In turn, this will upset Hailee at Melissia "stealing" her worshippers. 
And so, the power struggle is on! 

For now, I think Brad will just make an excuse and leave the gym before Camilia finds out his secret and they will stay in contact. Of course, this will inevitably create a future conflict with Alexandra once the goddess learns about her. And Brad will be unable to stop her physically since she absorbed his powers.
I also hope to see Emma again and she will have grown interested in Alexandra to the point of using her journalistic skills to find out more about her past, since she is the only god whose background we have yet to explore.


So yeah!
Those are my opinions on each god and where I believe the story is going. 

Please let me know what you think...



Author's Response:

Oh wow; now that’s a comment!

I wonder if it’s too early to ask people which god they like, when we’ve only seen episodic, slice-of-life type scenes with them. The lore and their ascension history would put into context each god’s character. But I purposely dove into the story this way, because I love it when stories unfold over time instead of just telling everything upfront. So, I’m sorry if the characters don’t make a whole lot of sense or seem too capricious.

The title “Divinity Lost” serves two purposes: one, it’s an homage to the epic poem “Paradise Lost” which is about Lucifer leading a rebellion against god and being sent to hell for it; two, it alludes to the history of how these gods became gods and how their power ‘may’ be fleeting. Again, I haven’t told the entire story upfront, and a lot of the backstory is purposefully a mystery.

Your predictions are awesome. I love ‘em. I’d say you’re close about Camilla and Emma. They’ll come back and create a lot of drama between the gods. Camilla will cause a rift between the gods, and Emma will serve to open Alexandra. It’s gonna be fun exploring all of them.

Awesome comment. I’m grateful you took the time to write it. I hope you enjoy the future chapters!

Reviewer: breastclimber Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 19 2024 8:29 PM Title: God Brad

I liked Melissa initially until she ate all those people on the boat.  I think a God/Goddess needs to give people time to come around, even if it takes decades.   I think that is why the system of jailing people for such long periods of time exists.   If there is even a small chance of redemption over their lifetime of being jailed is possible, then that is the reason to do it.   Also, I don't like that Melissa is not really treating her husband as a true partner in her life.   She is acting behind his back, and keeping secrets.   A true marriage just doesn't do that kind of stuff.


Hailee is just to concerned over that guy she likes, and is too obsessed with him.   She seems nice, but doesn't really seem open to other people who might really love her like she wants be loved.

Alexendra is strange because she likes to be nice, but she also likes to crush cities.   I guess she is Hedonistic too.

Brad is pretty relatable as a guy who wanted to do all of the god stuff, and then realized he should just be himself.  I guess even though I would want to worship a woman, I think I would be on team Brad given what I have seen so far.   Weird.



Author's Response:

Haha, yea, you’re pretty spot on with each god. I probably should’ve asked this question much later—after discovering more about the world and who these gods really are. I understand how Melissa’s actions may seem horrible at the moment, but she’s a product of being a goddess. Really interesting you’re on Team Brad. Nothing wrong with that, but I think I got my work cutout for me to really show who these goddesses are. :)

Reviewer: J - Vader Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 19 2024 2:56 PM Title: God Brad

Great chapter and the story has been amazing so far

Now I think the best gods are Melissa, Alex, Hailee and Brad so far

and the god I would worship is probably Melissa and close second Hailee



Author's Response:

Team Melissa, all the way :)

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