[Report This]Date: September 20 2023 1:39 AM Title: Chapter 3
Can't wait to read more. I've been following this story since you first posted your first chapter, and it has not disappointed in the least.
Aside from the rare grammatical error {e.g. "he" for "she" / "him" for "her", or visa versa}, which is quite easy to read through and understand your intent; your story is very well written and enjoyable.
I can't wait to see where this story goes.
Author's Response:
I'm really glad you like it DW :)
I'll try my best to avoid those grammatical errors. They're unfortunately a habit of mine.
I hope you continue to enjoy where this story goes!
[Report This]Date: September 16 2023 3:14 AM Title: Chapter 3
This is a really great story. Can't wait to read future chapters.
One has to wonder, why does Trish need an audience to watch what she does?
Back to your story overall, you really write well. You give a depth and descriptions of the mundane that add an extra level of surrealism.
It's those small details that make a story so much more realistic. As an example, what's the first things one would notice in a new environment? It's the visual light, strange sounds, and new smells. You just about hit it on target with this story.
Can't wait to read more; and what exactly is Loni's reward.
Author's Response:
Really happy you like it, thank you so much!
Maybe Trish just has a certain psychological tendency towards wanting to be observed? :P Realistically it's what my client requested so I was just following instructions on that front. I like putting details in, and I hope that detail serves it well when the story gets a little more surreal in future chapters. :)